....Ima be just honest all of your books ( the three you have rn ) are just great and i hope you keep going until the end. Wish you the best, i love your books and will keep reading and i hope you keep updating.With much love - a reader
another unreadable trash mtl translation
Liking it so far! Keep it up ???????????????
not bad at all. will definitely be looking forward to more from the author.
Its...... actually good? the pacing is neither too slow nor too fast, it makes you feel like time has passed way too quickly, I for some feel like there's some "Evolution begins from a big tree" Vibe and maybe that's why I am being biased (I also adore dungeon mc novels).
I am just going to say, what you need to improve. First of all, remove the stars from the word, it will not make the word bold, it makes the writing gibberish.Second you need to adjust the word length of a chapter 1500-2000.Third, the story is good, but you need to change the MC name. Or in the future, many people will troll you.Because the name you are using, it needs to be overpowered.
Yo!!!!!! This book is really good I hope author won't stop it soon......I'm first here✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌✌???????????????????????
Let's start with your writing quality. Maybe my standards are too high, but your sentences are too long (some parts are honestly unnecessary) and some phrases are misplaced. I suggest you read about grammar rules on misplaced modifiers. You should also edit your usage of punctuations, so you can seperate your long sentences better. You're also somehow using some words wrongly.For example in first chapter:"Is that anyway to talk to me? I remind you that without me you would be nothing!"You can rewrite it as:"Is that how you're supposed to talk to me? Let me remind you, you would be nothing without me!"There are more errors, but I'll move on to the next.Story Development. The reason why he died is because he wanted to end the contract. So they blackmail him, then they kill him and the reason is too shallow-- he wanted to end the contract. Since this is under realistic fiction, he will only be blacklisted at most or more blackmail will be used. To make it better, why don't you add more enmity for the main lead. You also didn't mention how he adjusted and stuff.Character design. It's a bit confusing to read since the personality of other's aren't that distinct. But it's okay. World Background. It's somehow clear. Overall, it's good.
Story so far seem somewhat generic, but there is a few unique takes here and there.English is good, updates are a bit slow, but writing is difficult so can't complain much.The main character is fairly fleshed outPersonally I like a bit more detail in my story eg. Base descriptions, what's in the crates he stole etc.The world background is very Interesting, but I don't feel like it's explored that much so far. But keep at it bud
I don't usually read novels which contains mysteries but after reading this, I'd definitely recommend it to anyone who enjoys hidden mysteries. Great job author! Hope to read more from you :)
after reading this , I just can't wait to read the next chapter . to much excited to read next chapter.story seems to be interesting and awesome
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