New author who could use a little bit of work on his English at times, but that being said it's better than 99% of the stuff on this site already! The majority of the time the author follows a logical progression, and shows the motivations for the characters actions in a way that makes sense and is engaging.I think this author has a lot of potential, and if he had a professional editor on hand this novel would be almost publishable!Keep on writing, keep on practicing, keep on doing your thing!As a piece of advice, you might want to start distancing yourself from readers comments. As your novel gets more and more popular you will eventually attract some trolls, and some very loud negative voices from idiots who don't know what a proper story is, and couldn't write one to save their lives. Make sure not to let them discourage you!