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Some of my biggest issues with this story are the weird slang the voice chick uses, the pacing and the MC. Slam donkeys? Pay pigging? Those terms make me cringe! The story picks up pace after the fourth chapter and before that, things are really slow. The funniest part so far was the thong scene in chapter five and that's it. The author constantly brings up the MC's hair and weight and constantly makes fun of him for it. Those jokes get old fast. Ben reminds me of Michael Scott but younger and self-aware of the fact that people don't like him. I like comedic stories where bad things happen to an unlikable protagonist (i.e. Dwight Schrute in The Office) but this story didn't make me laugh much
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I think there's nothing more to say, this is probably the best novel out of this batch of trial novels.This is the type of novels people are looking for.If I had to list the disadvantages, then it is the author's focus on sex. He's like a virgin teenager.Players go around having sex with NPCs as soon as possible.All NPC girls give away their body to any noble/mage NPC/player.Raped girls, murder girl cases...MC gropes a girl with mental power by mistake...MC stays in an Inn that is a brothel...MC gets info from a tavern that has girls serving customers with their bodies...the Chief of Magic Association has young pretty girls serving him in Tower.Every f girl is blushing and ready to have sex.ALL THIS IN 60 SHORT CHAPTERSThe spoiler is the reason why I can't give this story 5* even though the MC is a honest and decent guy. All the author thinks of is s*x and every next situation must be somehow involved with it!!!