C17Please make the MC smarter and more mature, or at least polite. I know he was a bigshot, but its irritating he keep cutting off someone else dialogue. he is exactly a muscle head just like how he describe his first disciple survivor. Other than this only problem, the whole story is very interesting.
Ahem, so, my thoughts after reading a few chapters.
The writing quality is slightly down, but from the looks of it, this seems like the book of a new author so that can't be helped. No author's first or even second book is ever good, including my own.
The overall story is great, but the interaction between the characters seemed forced. This is a common occurrence when starting a novel, even though you have the topic the characters are going to talk about in your head, it's just hard to write it out and make it sound natural. Character interactions are something I struggle with to this day, and it never gets easy, you just have to build up experience as you write and learn from your past mistakes.
This story is about romance and vampires, a common troupe which can be found in all forms of media. I suggest the author view some of these stories and try to pick apart what makes that vampire romance story enjoyable to him/her. When you find those points try to incorporate them into your book, and I'm not talking about the simple stuff, I'm talking about how the characters talk as well as the words and phrases they use. And if the author has ever read a vampire romance novel before, it's especially good to pay close attention to how those authors write the things you might be struggling with.
This is what I do every time I pick up a book to read, I look at how that author deals with the things I'm struggling with, and try to learn from his or her writing style.
I have more to say but this getting long so imma end it here. But if you've reached this for I suggest you give this book a try, it's good to support an upcoming author as you may never know if they'll one day right one of your favourite books.[img=recommend][img=recommend]
I rarely write reviews, which already proves that a story worth writing one left a big impression (positive or negative). At this point I read 701 chapters and I don't regret a second of it. Writing quality: A comparrison to the Webnovel standard would just be wrong. In 700 chapters there are barely any gramatical or spelling errors. Updating Stability: 2 daily updates each with at least 2000 words and great quality. In the 2-3 Months since I caught up not a single update was missed. Bonus chapters are rare, which considering the already insane sceddule is not an issue.Character design: The characters are neither the most unique nor generic. What realy makes them great to me is their development and growth. Each main character gets enough spotlight and even sidecharacters are rarely forgotten. The development is rather slow without stagnating, making it natural and considering the slow pacing of the novel in general (not even 4 months after 700 chapters), this totaly makes sence. Another thing I like a lot is that the plotarmor is not too obvious/extreme, nor are the characters stupid for the sake of plot. Story development: As said before, the pacing is realy slow, which I personaly love. While MC becomes one of the strongest realy fast, the story manages to still be balanced and present good chalenges, without feeling forced. World background: A clear defined powersystem, a fantasticaly described world and a intriguing history, which gives room to theorize. All of that without logical errors. The system: Every living being has acces to the system, which is designed to help them, reach a better evolutionary stage. There are few elements to the system, which apear to be based on luck (i.e. loot orbs or skill scroles). Those are minor and not as luckdependent as they apear in the beginning.The community: I have yet to find another community as active and interactive as this one on webnovel, and by now I look foreward not only to the chapters, but the commentsection as well.Overall 6/5 easily the best webnovel I found so far and even my second Favorit book/novel/mange etc. in general.
Honestly the story bis really good, and though it is sometimes cliche, it's able to stand out, what make it even better is the fact it's not a harem story, I'm so tired of those. the story is long enough for you to enjoy it l, with enough mysteries that keep you wanting to know more. At first nothing really happened, the mc never got into fights and it was more mystery after mystery, but now the Mc gets into fights and some mysteries were solved. also each character has at least a background, the only problem is that the you will never learn more about a character you focus some much on yang su, I kinda forget about the others, there is also so much happening in the story so it's hard to tell where the plot is going to go next. I also think that if the author is going to show romance, please don't focus to much on it, because when I read this I want to focus on the action, the story and romance is fine, but when your story is mostly action with no romance and all of a sudden there is a whole chapter dedicated to romance, it feels weird and random. but this is just my opinion, I am but one out of...... a lot.
The translation is really bad but if you Can read past the translation inconsistencies then maybe you might get hooked on the humor and characters in here.
BRO KEEP GOING AWESOME FIC BRO. DON'T DROP BRO. ????
To the people who think this novel is slow or boring what's wrong with your head do you have an attention span of a goldfish or do you need the main character to face slap 30 arrogant young master and save a hundred jade beauties every chapter to be entertained.This is a novel with great pacing and great progression with every improvement feeling like it was deserved unlike some other novels where a magical spirit uncle in a ring given by his parents who disappeared when he was born or maybe you want to read a novel about an OP mc who conquers the world when is 12 years old because his system just gives him unlimited power for doing a couple of push ups.
Hello, Shameless author here, first time writing a fanfic after being on webnovel for about three months now, didn't even know how to write and post my chapter using it, just uploaded the first complete one today, I accept advice in how to write and how can improve my work. Thanks
The MCs personality very much urks me, and the fact the the author tries to justify the pathetic personality of the MCs is even worse, a people pleaser is a horrid persona for an MC, and no matter how you try and spin it, that's exactly what he was doing, until he no longer needed too, but still tries to make them like him, so they put up with him, how sad, I might keep reading, and if it gets better, I'll retract this review.
This is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
Fuck 140 word ****
This is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
This is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
This is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
This is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
vThis is great so far. Gonna delete the review if i change my mind.
Mc looks sensible, has some good humour, pacing is done well
Hope author will keep writing.
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I got a friend who recommended me this book and darn he was right! This book is filled with so many mysteries and so many thrills! Cant wait for the future updates!