Well written and very descriptive. The intensity of every chapter remains the same which would definitely get the readers into the action and the story itself. The struggles of the MC gaining his strength is also something to comment on as it makes the story more interesting and intriguing. Keep writing and upload more chapters, author.
hello, author here I'm kind of new to writing history, but I've had this project for a while So if you have any criticism that could help me develop, I would appreciate it. :Dsorry for the review lol
You might love Mc, but my favorite is Baku.In my country Baku is spiritual monster, rumors say it exist, and there is proof.Anyways, I like the character design, and why is the system so cocky
INTENNSEEE!!! well-crafted fantasy with rich worldbuilding and high stakes. The lore is deep, the action scenes are gripping, and the protagonist’s journey is emotionally compelling. However, the pacing drags at the start, and some side characters could be more developed. Once it picks up, though, it really delivers. If you love high-stakes fantasy with vivid battles and deep mysteries, this is worth the read.
the start is very good and full of drama. Author also has good way of words. All the chracters are written well and don't seemed too forced. It's good read if you wanna start something new and intresting.
Took a while to finally get into the story but now I'm hooked to it. I can't wait to see the obstacles Aiden would face and how he'll overcome them.
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It has a great first chapter! Then the cart is really pushed off the cliff, hard and fast. By chapter 5 MC has the rarest metal in the world, gear that no one else can dream of having, has the intelligence of a 5 yr old when he is 18 and has been orphaned for many years. The plot is so thick it might as well be a bulwark shield. To top it all off the writing is everywhere, very hard to read and understand.
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So far I see no issue, I just need more of this story in order to know for sure, if enjoy this entirely. But for now, I like what I see. This novel has the right ingredients for sure.
This book seems like a traditional fantasy adventure story, stitching together various fantastic elements. It has a sense of déjà vu about it, as if it were a story I had fantasised about before.