Good story. Terrible fight scene writing. subpar overall writing. characters and world can use more depth, the power level of the empire or kingdom can be a starter. Shed some light onto his goals cause your Mc just reacted passively through the 14 chapters I read through. please develop the power scaling better, what tier was the monster he first faced, what can kill him blablabla. Think for a while then continue. Better yet just take some time polishing what you've already written. if you're first language isn't English then have a friend edit for you. Good luck.
Look author buddy I Kinda into Villain story stuff After reading RI. You story looks kinda classic saving world stuff,faceslaping coming back with big gun which MC already have but it’s for little boys…right…ok your story good check Cheerful people check New readers Check Bye I am not good in reviews But story is good for beginners I say …OK Tata bye
I this this could be one of the greatest web novels created. I love the characters, story, and the overall novel. I think it could go down as one of the greats. The web toon will probably be even better than the novel.
The title says it all and I was attracted to it like a moth attracted to light. I wonder whether I'll get to get off 6 times though... Kekekekekeke
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Solid development, no abuse, no overused cliches, adorable animals and a cheat thats not overly cheating. I will say there are a couple points im like “ dude really” but the mc is smart normal human trying his best to live his second life. good book.
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The writing is decent, the updates seem consistent, story development is alright and there are decent characters. The world building also seems OK. Honestly if you like some what JP-anime vibe story then give it ago. There is nothing that seems wrong, but the character of the MC and the side characters were rather annoying often. Plus the whole thing about everyone keeping things from him isn't my cup of tea and him not remembering things after major events. Plus the whole chapter of talking to himself about how he will not do something only for him to that exact thing at the end was annoying as well along with half of his self talk. All in all, if you are a fan of the genre give it a read and decide for yourself, it has its upsides, it wasn't my cup of tea, but it could be yours.
whats the connection of this story with kimetsu no yaiba? (demon slayer… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . .… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . . . .
Writing Quality: There are some minor mistakes but the real problem I have is that the writing isn't really smooth, I can't just feel the story when I read it, the quality is averageStory development: So, the mc is not really mature, which I prefer, but he is still a child so it is acceptable. There are a few things I really don't like, first the stuff with his mother and her family, that was just wierd and you should change the story because it doesn't make sense. Second is the trust with his teacher, nobody should trust each other so easily, I mean yes the teacher knows his secret, but we don't know why she is helping him, is it because she is special herself? And that she just trusted him so fast don't make sense.Character design: He is immature, childish and a bit stupid, I hope he will get soon mature and the bearing of a true king and get stronger soon. I don't really like stupid characters, and his lying skills are so bad, and that nobody can tell that he is lying with his cultivation techniqe is really sad and should be changed.Update stability: 8 chapters a week is really good, I can't complain with that, 5 stars for that.World background: We only know that the universe is really big and we can't comprehend how big it truly is, we know that his planet is nothing but a small planet which is really weak. Hope to get more informations for that, but it is still just the sart of the story.Overall: The story has potential, but the problems which I explained, is the reason I will drop this novel, I just don't like the writing style, I can't bring myself to read it or pay for the chapters. I would recommend you to give it a try if you want, the first 40 chapters are free.
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This is a very lighthearted take on what should be a dark story, and not in a bad way. The introductory dialogue gives some idea about the world but could set the stage better. I wonder where you are going with the system. Simply writing that the end goal is for him to become living may be boring. Consider spicing it up (despite being lighthearted.) The grammar is generally quite good. There are a few errors around ellipses, especially in a quotation. You don't need to double ellipses interrupted quotations, nor do you capitalise unless it starts a new sentence or is a proper noun. Please do not use brackets, and this is not an error per see, but you should use appropriate speech tags when someone is exclaiming, don't say: he said, either use an exclamation attribute or do not use speech tags at all. This is just an example. Also, saying dead lived is contradictory; you can't live while dead, lol. You may want to change your wording. Promising start, keep going.