This story just isn’t my type. A few descriptive phrases. I can name a million things I don’t like about this story; such as the names, Kyle’s mom and aunt hazel, the writing style, etc. however, what I do appreciate is the author’s effort to try something different from the norm and protest against gun violence. It takes a lot of courage to post your own work online. Although in my eyes the story is not the most interesting , I’m sure there will be the right people who would support your journey as an author.
MUSCLE HEAD MC ALERT!, no depth, wasted potential
The structures of the sentences is pretty bad, in a later chapter idk I did an expample.The story could be good, but as I said the structure of the sentences is so bad it ruins the flow of the story. Some grammar mistakes here and there.Story nothing new, but till now havent seen any story which has done a good job at writing such a story,pretty sad
imagination, because their life is only
Suddenly I remember my school homework. "By the way, did you have done the homework, Human Sciences? you know, something about human life".
"Bolehkah kau lakukan permintaan aku? Pemuda Perantau Malam?"
"Yes, there is a library which sells those kinds of things, it is a white building, if you follow the road with coaches you'll find it easily. There are two marketplaces, one is stalls in the centre of town its cheap but not much of a selection, while the other is closer to the noble district it has a wide array, but prices are high."
Few hours later... The chirps of the morning birds could be heard around the neighbourhood, signifying that the morning sun has come to wake everyone up. But the thick curtains of his windows blocked the greetings of the new daybreak. Then the person on the bed woke up while rubbing his eyes.
We all turn to look at Namjoon-hyung.
That's the way I like it and I never get bored
"Help me move this casket belonging to eldest brother onto the sedan chair belonging to the Mu Rong family, then follow them to their mansion. If the casket doesn't arrive at the mansion, then all the members from the Mu Rong family will be known as bastards."
I said yep what a concept