It's well written but when I wanted to sleep instead of reading any further I realized I was completely bored.
The author has done a great work writing this novel. The chapters are good and engaging. One of the best novels!!Keep it up author!!!
It felt like a typical vampire story at first, but then it turned out to be a time-shift case, idea is kind of uniquely hidden inside the story- and I can feel there is many mysteries hidden inside this plot!
Anyone know Raw name?
This is great ? don't listen to the one star giving asshole.
You have a lot of points that need to be addressed.1. Edit your work, smaller paragraphs are easier to read.2. Personal speech, the way you currently handle things related to people speaking is very confusing and not reader friendly. Adding personal speech is really easy by marking what was said with "blablabla". Read popular novels and look how they structure interaction of characters.3. Just in the first 2 chapters alone their are so many things wrong with logical thinking and game related stuff. For example, no one stays in a guild just because the guild leader says so, only idiots do that. Or losing all Equipment and having to start from lvl 1 again, players don't have those powers ingame even gm's can't just take your equipment and reset your lvl.There's so much wrong with just the first 2 chapters. Good luck
This was not as funny as I expected but the story is very engaging. I really like the main character Dexter. I am looking forward to see the character development of the character. Let's see how it progresses I am really waiting for the upcoming chapters. And wish author goodluck for writting such an amazing story.