Nero with the burning flames - Reviews

My second review for this story.I don't know why I'm still reading this. I could handle the poor grammar but the amount of times I've seen the wrong names used is astounding.But to be fair the names can very well be interchangeable, they are mostly interchangeable. Its hard to comprehend the love interest here, he met Rachael, Sarah's sister, once before she fell for him. Jill or either of the twins would have made a better pairing.I don't know how much more I will read of this.The romance tag is an afterthought, MC while he gets stronger he's constantly bellow the bar. What you would think is foreshadowing is just forgotten plots points.

Well, It was a good story, characters were interesting and altogether it kept me interested. It' a pity, in fact, that this book seem dropped.

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overall i really like this book, the world building and story progression is good, and it is one of the few web novels with systems that are actually good, the system isn't bratty or smug and does its job when it needs to. The protagonist too is good, he feels like a person that can actually exist and have overall good personality. So in conclusion give this story a try, its some of the few good ones in this site (i am writing this review to motivate the author as i am genuinely hooked up to the story and don't want this to be dropped) (sry for my english, its not my first language)

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overall a good start some places story seems rushed

This is a very lighthearted take on what should be a dark story, and not in a bad way. The introductory dialogue gives some idea about the world but could set the stage better. I wonder where you are going with the system. Simply writing that the end goal is for him to become living may be boring. Consider spicing it up (despite being lighthearted.) The grammar is generally quite good. There are a few errors around ellipses, especially in a quotation. You don't need to double ellipses interrupted quotations, nor do you capitalise unless it starts a new sentence or is a proper noun. Please do not use brackets, and this is not an error per see, but you should use appropriate speech tags when someone is exclaiming, don't say: he said, either use an exclamation attribute or do not use speech tags at all. This is just an example. Also, saying dead lived is contradictory; you can't live while dead, lol. You may want to change your wording. Promising start, keep going.

Laney looked at Echo suspiciously, "You are?"

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[...The system no longer has a theory about No. 785 sense of smell scent. The hypothesis was about the odor that the energy gem release.  However, 'No. 785 possession' five named Derek is not an esper, nor has ever eaten an energy gem. In addition usage of bionic powers such as smell was unallowed in Lab, so data about smell is nonexistent and is now being evaluated. Which is why Destiny turning was earlier than expected]

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