My Vampire System - Reviews

I genuinely love the concept behind this, and the story in general. The reason for the 4-stars instead of 5, however, is the author's lack of proper punctuation. There are a great deal of run on sentences, and not nearly enough punctuation to even everything out. It's like the difference between saying "Let's go eat Grandma!" and "Let's go eat, Grandma!" As far as I'm concerned, the errors severely break the immersion, to the point where this story is more of a "sometimes" story, rather than an "all the time" story. Other than that, though, I love it :)

Author supporting his own work. This is a story that will be updated daily with chapters.

An action Weak to strong story as the character Evolves completing tasks that only a vampire would need to do but not only that he also must struggle with all the disadvantages of a vampire as well.

The story could have been so good...
The only real weak point in the story is MC....
MC is actually brain dead like for real his IQ is so low it's unfathomable how he manages to tie his shoes...

Writing Quality ⭐⭐⭐⭐
Stability of Updates⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
Story Development⭐⭐
Character Design⭐
World Background ⭐⭐⭐


1) It took him like ages to figure out he was a vampire
2) When he finds out it takes him like 2 chapters to tell a random stranger all his secrets. (yea bro i have a system and stuff OOOO and btw i'm also a vampire)....
3) He does so much retarded stuff you think he would have killed himself by now...
4)System tells him if you don't drink blood you will run out of hp in 10h
what does MC do? Noting he goes to bed then panics when he wakes up cuz how could he have know his hp would drop ......
5) Has absolute no awareness of all the clues he leaves like if he would just use a bit of common sense....
6) The plot is super forced


In short this novel is super overrated and i have no clue why its up so high.

Brain dead MC ✔
Clueless MC ✔
Below room temperature IQ ✔
No common sense MC ✔
...


So in short sure you can read it but don't waste stones on it.

I really don't understand the Novel's 1st place.

The novel isn't bad as is, there is a lot of potential in the world building. The characters, while not quite there yet, aren't really bad. The main characters that is. Most side characters pretty much don't have any depth at all.

I don't particularly like the way the school life is described. It's a military school. Even if they want students to experience a rough life, students "disappearing" each year? Yeah, who would care about that...

There's also other things I consider plotholes that annoy the heck out of me. First describing portals as a precious technology that is only in the hands of three kinds of people, but nevermind the fact that the "dangerous" red portal is accessible at a school, how come there are no guards/you can simply enter?

All in all, a good approach but the plot really seems too unlogical to me at times.

Seemed interesting. I thought, Hey a story about a sytem that slowly turns tbe mc into a fill blown vampire, neat right? While the idea is certainly cool, and the world backgrojnd at least plausible in the sense that its slightly different from the usual people from regular earth now have powers trope, its...dull.

The characters are currently extremely shallow, there is the most strange contrivances and forced behavior.  Now trust me I want to enjoy the story but the amount of hand waving required is rather high. Im at the point where its required that I simlly forget about any semblance of logic or reasoning. Heck even just basic plot flow requires me to have immense suspension of disbelief.  

Tbe idea has great merit. The method the author uses to slowly change the mc into a monsterous creature is neat. The actjal implementation within tbe story and how the mc and surrounding characters react is not neat. Its dull.

Keep trying author, I am sure you will make it better and better as you go. Just dont force stuff. You want something to happen, ok, them think about the most logical and realistic way it could happen in the world setting. Dont just force things to occur a la deus ex machina, hand wave miracle juice.

Good luck!

A Gem, i would place this novel with Lord of mysterious simply based on potential, the characters arent cutouts they make rational and irrational decisions that fit there character
Im very happy that a new original has found its way to the top
Pros
Potential for the story to go anywhere
Origional idea that has a unique spin on an monster system
Stable uploads
Im not able to guess the plot or what will happen next

Cons
I need more chapters and the chapters fly by due to this

Give it a try, its intriguing where the story is progressing with little predictables that are a common turn off for the system oriented genre

In my opinion, this novel isn’t #1 rank material, but the author is a genius for bribing ppl with extra chapters for power stones.

Writing quality is not the worse but still pretty bad, lots of misspelling and wrong words used. Once example, ‘integration’ is frequently used instead of ‘interrogation’. Although this happens quite a lot, the real problem is the way the story is written. The writing style is too shallow, it doesn’t give you the sense that you are immersed in the story world. There are not enough details to describe the character and environment. Up to now I still can’t picture what the characters and the school look like. One reviewer compared this with Lord of the Mysteries, which is just absurd. The writing style of LoM makes you feel like you are inside the MC’s head, immersed in his thoughts, emotions, and actions. This novel feels like you’re reading a summary of the MC’s daily activities, it is detached and doesn’t bring you up close and personal.

Story development is progressing nicely so far. Contains your typical tropes and plot armor, but it’s not as absurdly done as other webnovels. Not much else to say since the novel is just beginning.

Character design: It’s too early to tell but so far just 2 characters have hints of hidden depth, which could lead somewhere interesting. For now, the characters seem very shallow. The characters need to be fleshed out more, especially regarding their physical descriptions. Vague descriptions like ‘short brown hair and tall figure’ and ‘long blonde hair and perfect proportions’ doesn’t cut it.

World background has great potential. Not much is revealed yet, but there are portals to other worlds and different species and factions, which leaves much to be discovered.

Overall, I like the novel. There are only 108 chapters released so far, so there is room for improvement. I look forward to seeing how this novel progresses, it definitely has great potential.

How is this piece of trash ranked as #1 on Webnovel?
It's literally painful to read, no matter what age or interests you have.
The only positive thing about this novel is the rate of updates.

Writing quality is below average even for this site. Half-baked English with multiple spelling errors, basic language, and plenty of grammatical errors. It's slightly above a 1-star due to it being 80% coherent and identifiable as English, but that's about it.

Updates are probably why this novel still lives on. The author just keeps writing, and the mindless reader just keeps reading. The chapters are short though, so really nothing special even there.

The story up to the point that I've read makes no logical sense at all.

The characters are as basic as they come, almost as if they were directly drafted from a character template for a B-rated anime show.

The only reason I gave the World Background a 2-star rating is that I quit reading before the author even had a chance to improve on it.

Boring.

The main character is forgettable with no character traits apart from 'poor weak orphan'. The supporting characters are even worse.

There are no hooks in this novel that make me want to read further an absolutely disappointing experience.

Having ventured into the captivating world of "My Vampire System," I found myself utterly engrossed in its intriguing blend of supernatural intrigue and character development. The narrative weaved a spellbinding tapestry, where vampires with unexpected complexities evolved alongside their challenges. The plot kept me on the edge, as the protagonist's transformation was both exhilarating and thought-provoking. Despite the dark themes, there was an underlying message of self-discovery and redemption that resonated deeply. A must-read for those who crave a fresh take on the vampire genre, this book is a thrilling, emotionally charged journey.

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It's a decent read, but I got pulled out of the story a lot by the world, supposed to be a military school but there is zero discipline and pretty much the entire story plays out like "Lord of the Flys" with older kids/stronger kids deciding on the rules and punishments. All this is justified by this apparently making the weak kids want to get stronger so they sell themselves to the military to get resources, which in this world the global military that is fighting an technologically superior race, thinks that's how their going to win by holding power and privilege to a few people instead of you know, what a military actually values like discipline and team work. So anyway I quit at chapter 50, but if your looking for "slowish build vampire Lord of the flies high school". **. It's really not that bad, just fell short in a few too many places for me to continue.