Interesting. There are a lot of characters and some chapters are very long if reading on smartphone but it is fun to read. I feel close to Alexis and love to read her POV.
A popular premise, but well-executed. There’s a few flaws I wanted to point out, in the hope to help you progress.Your grammar is passable, although I would personally refrain from using the passive voice as much as you do. It makes sentences clunky, vague and awkward. So if you can change the subject of the sentence in order to rewrite it in active voice without this changing your meaning, I advise you to do so.There is an absence of rhythm in your writing. I’m aware it isn’t easy to write with rhythm, and personally, I struggle with it as well, but try to bring some more rhythm to your paragraphs.The dialogue is clear, but sometimes it comes across a a bit forced. Overall, I believe your work holds a lot of potential. I wish you luck!
Writing Quality ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️As far as I can tell(i don’t have the best memory) there are practically no erros in this book.Updating Stability ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️The Author updates at least once a day and two times most days so great job on that.Story Development ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️I love the story and the author has done and awesome job with the story and hasn’t left any plot holes or anything.Character Design ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️The character designs are amazing and all the important characters has extensive backround with no holes in them(unless there is something our author doesn’t want us to know yet)World Backround ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️The author has done a great job with the world backround and seems to have worked really hard on all the different characters and organizations in the world and the different events.Overall ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️Overall this is an extremely well written books with little to no mistakes or plot holes. I definitely recommended if you want a book with a op mc and a VRMMORPG. There are also a lot of reincarnated as a slime references in the book. My only qualms about the book is there are some cliche romance scenes that I were disappointed about, and it does seem to be heading in the direction of harem(multiple girls are in love with mc).
amazing work keep up the good work (here an idea try adding creating table/workbench so when he upgrades it he can blue futuristic high walls)
Saitama was already one of my favorite MC... and now starting his own adventure in One piece world! This is a masterpiece! i enjoyed the first chapters! Keep the hard work up
Raw Title: 时停五百年Status: 464 Chapters (Complete).....As compared to other Chinese novels, it is way shorter................................
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this got high ratings so i tried it. pretty good concept, but why do you have info dumps in every chapter? first 12 chapters and what do we got? yes you keep saying that you're a beginner writer BUT you could've learned from your predecessors right? chapters are short. At the end of some chapters you said they're a long one, but that's just because of the info dumps. dang there's even a chapter where he only change clothes and inform us his favorite color which is red and black . and don't you try delete this review . already skimmed those chapters up to 60+ but still, can't really bring myself to read this one. anyways, nice try and learn more.
it's a good novel. it can grip the attention of the reader. I hope we can read more of it. ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ? ?? ? ? ? ?