it's pretty good. I'm glad I started it.
this has been good so far I REALLLYYY LOVE THE REFERENCES FROM THE OG NOVEL it makes me feel I'm not sure if nostalgic is the right word ? but still it's something I'd say
read the episodes released so far and it is a very amusing and interesting story. keep posting ? I will definitely read it all ☺️?good job ?
1.)A child of Senju and Uchiha that is enough to f- up everything unless he is taken to root or stolen by Orochimaru. He must be taken to root even without chakra and Zetsu would taken him during his birth maybe taken his mom before birth. 2) Senju clan and the name Senju was disbanded. I have no idea how so much OC Senju is popping up. 3) Transforming MC's clone to chakra metal sword by transformation justu? Hold up, wait a minute, something isn't right. 4) Chapters are too short and lack depth. 5) Dialogue is somewhat lifeless and low quality a.i - ish. 6) Pace is slow, too slow. you can easily skim and skip most of the chapter as far as I've read. 3-6 chapter can easily be condensed to one chapter. ************Writing Quality 3. Story Development 2. Character Design 2, Updating Stability 5, World Background 2.Writer-san your chapters are too short yet filled up with water and pace of story is too slow. MC is extremely naive to the point of being unlikeable also a little bit of pushover not an endearing quality in any kind of MC. OG Naruto has many plot holes, but your story started with a plot hole Senju father with enormous pool of chakra and contradiction Uchiha mother. Anyway with best wishes to you and your story ( At least you had the balls to write and publish you ff). Bye have fun and live happily.
I've gotten to chapter 75 - so far this is some of the best writing I have seen on this platform. I am a huge fan of the start of the novel...
"....." Mr. Rioy was silent with his serious expression.
Which begin from curiosity. An adventure that will change the world.
Mamat smiling and prepare to answer. "It's easy, they will do stupid and useless things. They may not be funny people, but they are smart, they will pay someone to become their UNLIMITED bullying.
Is this going to be a tragedy? Like where he will move to different worlds but will have to leave the people he cares for in those worlds? Or where he will lose loved ones? I hate tragedies so I would like a heads up.
The best thing about these stories is the sincerity the writer has for his works, there's no fluff or padding just raw human emotion that this world lacks in modern times.
❝Halt blasphemous tongue, Vita, or see it forever separated from mouth!❞ Marcella warned firmly, brown eyes blazing with the tangerine of Vulcan's creation. ❝Walls have ears.❞
'No! No! Skip! Skip!' Mina couldn't help but panic inside when she saw the scene. It was that time when she asked Tarou about her gender. Before she could say something, she heard Devin whisper close to her nearest ear.