I used to snort when I saw an author rate their own work 5 stars, but now I embrace the hypocrisy!This is my first attempt at writing since I was 13 and wrote awful, terrible Dragonriders of Pern fanfics. This might not be much better, but ill try.
This story does have potential. But there are some problems that I find. If the author reads these hopefully he can answer some of my question that I have. For the record I am caught up to the latest chapter and will continue reading for sure. For the Writing Quality theres alot of grammatical errors and misspelled words that do need to be fixed. English might not be their first language and that's totally cool but theres alot that need to be updated. Story Development is interesting but it feels like a train with no brakes. Very fast paced. This isn't a bad thing but keep in mind that your Character Development bbn and World Building could suffer from the pace your setting. You arent even 100 Chapters in and it feels like he already God level. I believe the story would benefit more if there more time spent on him training his and other powers so we understand everyone's power level. This goes hand in hand with Character Design. Everyone feels flat. Secrecy is good but we know next to nothing about the MCs friend or Best Friend. Nor do we know why William is the way he is. Emma seems to be the classic soft hearted healer. She, in my opinion could be more of a personality or just different. Alice is also very flat so far. Is she suppose to be a companion? is she just a glorified assistant? I have a feeling that she could be so much more, such as taking the initiative and using her animal forms. The MC himself also need a bit more design. Especially when is comes to his background and the World background in general. What happened to his parents and family? What is his motivation to obtain power? What about him makes him be worthy to obtain a Pure Soul? Not to mention this Acedemy. Is it special? How is the MC able to go to a Acedemy even though hes an orphan? The back ground need a lot more fleshing out. Such as the the Countries on Earth. What is the Federation? What's the big deal about the 5 Great Families? What's society and the Government like? What role does the Association play in the Government? Where is the setting of the story? US? Europe? Asia? Or because of how the Calamities changed the landscape, is there even any old Governments left? I feel like so far that the story is sprinting on and not pausing the look at the scenery.
This book is one of my favorites. The quality and plot development is very good. You'll never get bored. And a warning though, it has alot of cliffhangers. Once your in this hole, you're hearts will be bursting to the seams because of anxiousness waiting for the next chapter.Hands down to one of the talented young writers that I've known.If you want to have advanced chapters, I can recommend to check her out on, https://***.patreon.com/tinyeyecat
A good start to a good story. I would like to see more of this story. I would like to see a harem. I think that it would be a good idea. I really like the fact that it has a orc main character.
Overall I'll say it's a really good book, top notch characters, uhhhhh, not so shabby character design, and piece of the art world building,dan howbeit quite similar to most protagonist is one of the few main characters that actually seeks vengeance but doesn't let go of basic morality, illara isn't a pushover and actually stands out unlike most female leads, and sai isn't the dumn jock boyfriend, all in all I think it's a great story.??