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A student kills a teacher, the head-boss comes over and is like 'Why they dead'. The mob is like ' Student bad, kill student'. Head-boss is like ' Ah this mob is too much' so decides to hold a battle royal, if Student wins they be free but if they lose, something happens.
The story was very hooking and it made me on edge of my seat. This novel was standard for me so nothing I can critisize much. The Main character was very strong and was dealing his problem with such courage. Making me attached to him and admire him. Nice setup! I hope you win the contest and get an entry on becoming a movie! Kudos!
This story was definitely a hidden gem for me- I always seen this story but I ignore it due to personal bias- that was a mistake and when I finally had the courage to read this story I was 100 percent please on how well done the characters and world thats this story brought to me.
CRITICAL REVIEW~ Binge read all as of current 121/121Quite decent and a pleasant surprise! Very surprised by the lack of attention it is getting. Halfway to a hidden gem I'd say.The English of the author is also at a native level. So that's great! There are only occasional mistakes. It's not flowery or written in an impressive way, but it's good enough for web novel level.For the most part, a decent written cultivation novel. There is a clear attention to care about the author's writing and it's heavily expressed in the author's thoughts too. Cultivation levels are actually defined here and while its mechanism isn't so detailed like some novels. With the cesspool of cheap cultivation novels, this was one of the ones that actually gave at least a brief explanation of each realm. So we can have some understanding of why level 20 is better than level 10 or what's fundamentally different.At it's essence, the story is not much different to the usual cultivation novel. But what I appreciate is the author most of the time tries to make things different even if it's only a little to alter the cliche's. Particularly the parents which I love.That is the author's biggest strength and what I find most attractive of this novel.That said, there are still a fair amount of scenes which don't seem much different, but that's alright. Majority of chapters were good. Especially the first 50 chaps. The novel gets boring or stale when it doesn't involve the main plot or just feels insignificant. Like the auction chapters, as one commenter complained, and a couple of chapters after that too. As for most recent, I found the entrance exam into the sword sect were boring too. Why? Because it isn't anything different to an ordinary cultivation novel. He was literally just there to show off and it was a very expected result. There wasn't much thought to it either. I understand from the perspective of the protagonist why he did so instead of the free backdoor because of his wishes, as well as the fact that it was relatively peaceful times. But as a reader, if there is no suspense it's no fun. It should've been done in 1-3 chaps even if it's too fast. Just so we can accelerate closer to the fun parts.This transitions to my next point which is pacing. Pacing of this novel is not fast and just a little slow. I don't mind it since I really enjoyed the character interactions and the care put in with it as it's fleshed out well. My issue is when you do this with the aforementioned boring events. I really felt bored to the point that I actually skim read. That's not a good thing. So I hope the author would rush events like this instead of its usual snail pace.Characters in the novel are very good. Honestly one of the few cultivation novels that put a lot of care into writing about the family and it was to the point where we can recognise that hey, these parents actually exist and are truly living with the MC. They are in fact main characters which is ironic to say, but unfortunately with how the plot is developing they fall out of relevance so hopefully the author doesn't do so. I want to see them fight along side the mc a lot actually. Mc is well defined and one of those novels that does really great to match the age of the mc to his behaviour and experiences. This is not merely told, but also shown a lot. Although annoying at times because of his age, it's realistic! Good job author.On another side note, I'm in anticipation for when we see children of the plane meeting eachother. That's something I think the author should really capitalise on and do much more often as that's the whole biggest attraction that the novel should be trying to sell. Try and make it so shaking events that they stir up connect each other which prompt them to encounter each other. That's what I would do, and that's what I'm trying to do in a novel I'm writing actually hehe. Really, I think this is one of the novels where the author has much more lenience and tolerance to have the privilege to delve into the perspectives of the other protagonists. As long as you withhold information that may downplay future events, you can make it interesting to occasionally see what they are doing, and I really would enjoy a couple of chapters dedicated to them. Another point that should be mentioned is, this novel needs to be contracted. Author, please get a contract. I don't want to see this novel be dropped due to lack of publicity and readers. This novel should have way more attention. Otherwise, if it is dropped, I really may go write my own version of this novel. I already had a somewhat similar premise in mind with novel(s) I'm currently writing and planning, so I don't have any guilt if I did such a thing!---------------------------------Overall, a decent cultivation novel that differs from the norm while retaining its essence. Nothing major breaking, but it's an eye-catching past time out of its lot. I usually end my reviews with shipping because I only read romances/ harems. But unfortunately, with it's somewhat snail pacing, we really have arguably 2 heroines introduced. 1 of which only appears as of recent. Hopefully it would be done well. I really want to see true shura fields/ asura arenas and serious romance since I think the author somewhat has the capability to pull it off. I love drama so yeah xD. Almost every harem novel downplays the difficulties of a harem by 50x how it should be. Just so they can live happily together. I'm definitely an avid supporter of small harems. Not all beauty relationships should end with the mc being together with x beauty.I do want to bring up 1 character and that is the heroine Xiao'er. She's a heroine and the author likes her which is obvious considering she's a main heroine. But there are a fair amount of readers that criticise her, and don't like her. Funnily, I don't like her either. I don't like her to the point where I honestly would rather see her be killed off or left behind.Why don't people like her? Well I will try make this brief and blunt and give my perspective of why I don't which share similar thoughts and sentiments to other readers. She's just a normal girl with normal thoughts and perspective. This is especially harsh in a cultivation world because of how brutal such a world is. Her immaturity, her unreasonableness, naivetes combined with her liveliness and cheerfulness with consideration to her status, and her occasional annoyances to the mc makes her very unappealing. Particularly, as 1 commenter mentioned, she takes too much liberties. Even if the Mc is fine with it, the setting and fundamental role can irk readers and find it hard to empathise or accept.While It's completely acceptable the way she is for her age as the MC and her have been there for each other for years, but it can genuinely be irritating to see. She is also just a maid and is 'useless'. I don't agree with her being useless because she's a great emotional support to the mc and she has her role to play in the story. Not that I have any ounce of care for her actually, truly. But combining everything I've said. She's so ****ing unappealing which in turn makes her unlikeable. Worst part is she's a main heroine and maid! So she has always many scenes with the MC. There's a reason why many people don't like childhood friends heroines and Xiao'er is essentially the same. It's not like she's a ***** or an arrogant character. it's just her entire construction as a character is asking to be disliked even tho she hadn't really done anything wrong.She is essentially the Xiao Lingxi of ATG (the little cousin from the start of ATG). It only makes it worse if the author tries to make such a character relevant (AHHH Xiao Linxgi!!) Out of all the ATG wives which is like 7+ she is the worst by far too. Unless it's executed well with a big arc for her IMO. Really, I've seen to many writers try to make a 'useless' or vase heroine into a better character and 85% of the time it's a fail. Cultivation readers particularly want to see heaven defying jade beauties falling or cool heroines being conquered. That's the reality. If you had Xiao'er as the top disciple of some powerhouse. And I guarantee, there would be at least 50% more readers who would like her. Even if you retained her personality the exact same. Maybe that's just me, but I for sure am. It may be disdainful and even hypocritical, but for me it's the truth.I ranted there. But I hope the author gets a better perspective and insights into why readers may not like such a character. I'm definitely bias, and I hope she disappears. I know for sure the author will make a drastic change to her once she gets hit by the brutality of the cultivation world so she will get her huge 'character development'. But I've seen the execution many times and unfortunately it often falls flat even if it's executed well because of poor after thought. After all, many cultivation novels are about the mc and ascending higher, and for authors the romance part really isn't their forte'. That said, I still wish to see it be done well. If anyone has any thoughts to add about Xiao'er I would like to hear it and see if any fellow daoists agree with what I said.
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heyo crazy cronie here,review on 31/03/2021 @chap373 (released chap till date: 444)review divided in: Short reviewLong review IMORatingsConclusionWarning (includes spoilers) short review: A must read story for harem fans. A good romance story but not for those who are coming after VRMMORPG tag. long review: pros: 1) Author did a nice job in romance here. A 'true hidden gem' for harem fans. 2) This is a little dark novel. But also has fluffy side. Contradictory huh? Read it and you might understand. 3) One word for world building: FANTASTIC! With put real hard work in creating the plot and the mystery. This world still after so many chaps is a mystery. 4) I love the writing format of the novel. Especially those moments of system (not a spoiler since it's in tags) but yeah! I loved it..5) Characters created by the author are awesome! They all feel real, they have their own personalities and ambitions, something many authors of these days lack.6) This novel surprisingly contains humor. Yeah ik there is a comedy tag, but despite the tag most of the novel do stupid jokes.. like fart jokes and the likes. This one I truly enjoyed the comedy moments.7) the interactions between the characters are awesome!! This is how conversations in reality takes place, something which cannot be easily portrayed! The interactions between the mc and his girls never failed to put a smile on my face at the end of the chapter8) I love how the author released few chaps with his girls POV (tho mainly focused on FL, but still a plus)cons:1) [NOT REALLY A CONS] As mentioned above this novel has a dark side despite the fluffy romance moments. (This depends person to person, for me a pro)2) [NOT REALLY A CONS] No probs with updates. My basic requirement with updates is (7ch/d for og) & (14ch/d for tl). But this is my personal scale so you might as well ignore it.3) There are few typo errors. No prob with grammar.. (well there are prob with pronoun at the last chaps i read like mistaking mc for she) but mainly spelling mistakes and misplacement of words. 4) The writing.. I already mentioned many times in my comments but it is confusing few times who is speaking what.5) Even though the interactions are awesome, we many times fail to grasp the emotions and facial expressions of the characters, since it's never mentioned what expressions the characters really have on their face. 6) pacing i felt sometimes it was little slow. It would have been better if it was a little faster. IMO:- maybe if the confusion of who is speaking which line is reduced it might become a better read- RATINGS: writing: 8/10 (pro-4&6 & con-3&4)update: 8.5/10 (con-2)plot: 8.5/10 (pro-1,2&3, con-1) characters: 8.5/10 (pro-5,6&8)pacing: 8/10 (con-6)dialogues: 9/10 (pro-7 con-5)entertainment: 8.5/10OVERALL: 4.2/5 Conclusion:As a harem fan, I would definitely want this novel to get more attention!! Also to the readers please support this novel with at least powerstones if possible!!And thanks to the author for the chaps as always! WARNING: *SPOILER (not exactly)*- MC may seem a little edgy.- rather than a anti hero, one might as well refer him as evil- sometimes mc is sharp and sometimes dumb (there is a reason tho)- mc is dense af!
Probably the best fanfic I've ever read. 5* on everything except the translation (which sucks big time!)Unfortunately it seems to have been left at around chapter 240 here, u can read the rest on MTL (just Google search it, you'll see comrademao.mtl link). Has some really interesting uses of some mons (especially Tyranitar who has been given some powers of Groudon). Use of Psychic is pretty impressive too.
This novel is very good. MC is very OP but that's 99% of the novels. NPC's feel like real people who react to the world and are smart. The author here borrows from Naruto and reincarnation of the strongest sword god.
I'm leaving this review because I actually think the concept for my story is pretty solid. Basing the story during the modern day, and seeing how fictional creatures and ideas react with the modern world is cool. I'm also going to try to improve my writing quality with each chapter.
im happy because the author adds classical songs in the story (bcos im a sucker for classical music lol) and not only that, the way the author describes is so beautiful. the story is great, keep up the good work! ?
The character developements are fun and kinda makes sense. The romance, altough awkward from the start, gradually becomes quite realistic adding to the fact that they are each others first love. The fight scenes are enough to give us action; not too much that it takes over the story which is "Seeking the Dao". There are things that the MC realises and they are applicable too. Not much is revealed because the MC is still in the Novice Village but some World Backround are well thought.