Mandatory 5 star review. It's my first time writing a story and I hope you like it. Please share with friends if you like it. ;););););););)
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Started strong, dropped of slowly, came back alright, and shot itself in the head
Hey readers, author here! Just wanted ya'll to note that this is my first time writing a novel and if you see some mistakes here and there please help me note them. By the way, English is not my first language but I think I am doing my best so far.
"Yo, yo… The Chosen Ones are all from the Dragon Country!" "Haha! Serves them right. It's their fault for having so many people. Only a few of them died." - Chapter 1
What a deeply imaginative and thoughtful construct we have here! Hitting right of the bat with great amounts of detail in the world and the story. The first chapter is filled with intrigue about the world, the concept of the veil and the presence of the forces outside is just so well put forth that you have no choice but to be lost in it. Stanley's character is also very likeable and endearing which just enhances everything a step further. Impeccable action and thoughtful storytelling have been weaved together in a grand tale. I am planning to read this for a while and would highly recommend it to everyone as well!
Overall it's a mostly decent story.
Interesting World building, some really intriguing concepts, and some really cool side characters.
However the big weakness of this book is the MC: He starts as a whiny, overthinking, self pitying, and overall very negative person.
Which normally wouldn't be a problem except for one little detail: the Author drags Character development out WAY too long.
After 187 chapters, the Character development can be called "slightly there" at best, and despite several life altering events that *should* improve the Character in a positive direction to a larger degree considering how jarring they are, the MC barely changes.
Now, I'm not really an advocate of MCs who have drastic changes of personality practically overnight, this author has swung the pendulum too far to the other end, given the start state of the character in my opinion.
TLDR; the Book is Good but, MC personality is that of a garbage human being, and takes too long (in my opinion at least) to improve
mc is actually a naive villain, huh. just a few people's fault he hit flat. he wants true friends without pity, but mc's own condition has made people feel sorry for him. mc himself can't understand the feelings of some of his friends, why should his friends know the true feelings of this stupid and naive mc
The novel's got a pretty good concept and I'm finding it quite a read so far. The only thing weird about it is the names of places and culture it's depicting around the area MC lives in but that's just my personal opinion. Great piece of work and looking forward to more updates from author!
here author sama you said you wanted a rewiew so here it is so far the story is well written and i'm enjoying it and i'm waiting for more chapters the descriptions are good and the world creation is excellent but I didn't really like the "schemes" of some characters but that's just my personal taste and i have some questions for you author sama Could you give a description of the appearance of the protagonists?and is ama love the protagonist's love interest? and a suggestion? perhaps? I just want to talk about a power that I think is cool and that I wanted to see in history the weakest affinity of the protagonist is time, right? but I would really like if the protagonist uses temporal powers
Ride on author. Please update more frequently. Talia is gonna be a mad character I'm sure of it. Let's just wait for character development to kick in. So sear readers or potential ones, you've come to the right place.
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