Story is meh, interactions are forced.Fir example: bold agent guy says your wife is a fox spirit.MC be like: Okay.….Bold agrnt guy: that dude is too clam send more people to observe him!Bold dude’s Boss then is like: He is not ordinary so therefore we must recruit him!I can see the strings in this novel so I’ll give it a One star in Story developmentCharacter design is meh so 2 stars.World background is 1 star as the spirit group government agency is like the rest of the novel is very poorly thoughtout.
gives me terror infinity vibes (dude gets teleported into different scenarios) but his golden finger is his proficiency panel. also the synopsis is lying when it says he learns basic swordsmanship instantly, he had to train for a month so at least he aint a genius.*spoiler* the annoying rich guy gets killed. ?
The world-building is nice, and the MC is solid. Overall, the book really gives off the vibe of another land, and it pretty much captures the surrealness of that said world. Just a minor tweak though, you can lessen the paragraph division so the readers won't be encouraged to skip through the dialogues. Adding a couple more words on a sentence said by a certain character will really help with engagement... not too much though since that would bore the readers. I tend to in the opposite spectrum where I make all my paragraphs longer... and that's a bad habit I couldn't get out of my system. You're writing style is fresh, you just have to make it smoother. An interesting read overall, definitely sticking around for more ^_^
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Okay, frankly you have a great, unique idea going on. But honestly, this feels like a cross between an academic paper and a contract to get myself a virtual avatar built not a novel. ?First of all, I suggest you do away with the repeated use of the phrase "the said this and that" its disturbing, and it gives a very mechanical and legal outlook to your text. Like it's a user term from some software that you'll just scroll to the end and hit I accept without reading a single word. Secondly, the second chapter feels like some friend of mine saw an amazing movie and is briefing me about it. Not that I'm reading it for myself. You are telling me word to what what is happening, who is feeling what etc. Things that should be shown, should be subtly conveyed through dialogue and other creative means are flatly thrown at my face. Paragraphs are too long and too full of text. This chapter screams for more dialogue and conversation. Make your sentences short, snappy and try to keep too much scientifically jargon out. Or provide a glossary at the end of the chapter. All in all, I truly appreciate the uniqueness of your idea, but to be a novel, it has a long way to go. Good luck.
Looking forward to see where this adventure will take us. Keep up the great work loved the previous version as well. ???? Can’t wait for more bongo cat antics.
Very under rated story but actually very fun adventure and some of the chapers are so funny that i was laughing. The MC is a good-for-nothing cultivator who is trying to romance his master. He is actually a god immortal character that is reincarnated into a good-for-nothing cultivator because his cultivation potential is suppressed. Story is actually very deep and epic.
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its a good story but omg did you start charging way fun too soon. I mean for real thats just greedy as h ell. will just wait till it gets bootlegged.
I think I have outdone myself with this Novel. I wanted to write something unique, fun, serious, and also realistic.Like what would happen if massive trees grew out of the ground one day? Here is your answer. XDMy writing quality is lit.... 10/10Stability of updates.... well things might look good right now, but I have a next novel I dedicate my time to so.... 7/10Story Development... I plan to give this a real novel feel so 10/10Character Design... I think I excel in this category, backstory, and everything links together so 10/10World Background...Depending on how this novel does, I will create a map of the world for fans so 10/10Note: This is a harem (somewhat). The relationships tend to get complicated but there will be no NTR. It will have a happy ending (somewhat). And just read and review your opinion.
such a nice story, I never knew I was missing something of this calibre. The work and details are so true. Also, I could see and feel the atmosphere that author tried to write in words...A read is definitely worth it.?❤️??
Thanks for uploading or translating the volume, also hoping that you would also post the 11.5. Thank you!QwertyuiopAsdfghjklZxcvbnmAsdfghjklQwertyuiop