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it follows the exact plot and system of the novel about beith a bandit ...................... .............b.................................
Should use the punctuations more accurately! Don’t put the comma like , this. You should do so like, this. Other than that, this feels like a good parody work to chill and go through. Short, funny, and direct chapters about a very powerful MC… This will be very likable to those who like their MC as overpowered as possible
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I like how Daren is being more of a reasonable person than Marceus. I have qualms about using mockery as an encouragement. Marceus! You can encourage people without teasing and degrading their person! Poor Daren. Evlin is such a savage! I can see why you have her as your favourite. Please give me more Lilith interactions!I've read the entirety of the updates and some concepts still confuse me for some reason, like the origin of beasts and spirits, or did I just miss them? Also, the consistent change of characters in focus is quite distracting. I suggest that you dwell on a particular group for an extended window before moving on to the next. The action scenes are quite abrupt, so it lessens the excitement. You do not need to use such complex words to relay an action; you just have to narrate to the readers what you're seeing in your mind as honestly as possible.I don't think that your grammar is that bad. Although, I have noticed overuse, misuse, and absence of punctuations in several passages. Punctuations are like the backbone of grammar. It allows the writers the opportunity to have better transitions. It is our job as writers to study te very grammar aids in out story-telling, and we are always learning. In addition to this, instead of using just adjectives, can you elaborate more on your descriptions? The readers would like to see the vividness of your imagination! :D I did not say anything out of spite. I hope that you take them as constructive. I'll be cheering you one! Your story has a great setting and there will definitely be readers who will love this utterly.
the thing that rlly bothers me about this novel is the inconsistency in the story and how everyone and their mothers are so gung-ho about pk-ing that its just a major turn off from the story. Like how you would skip the parts about the mc dungeoning and the spend 4-7 chapters about him getting pk-ed or mc pk-ing. the plot inconsistency is rlly bugging me out, like how you plotted out the story beforehand and then when u go to write it its nothing like the story you plotted out already, and more of just sitting down and improvising the whole thing. there was something i was rlly looking forward to later in the novel but all of a sudden getting that event pulled out from under my nose made me deduct major points from this novel. and idk about anyone else but when i read a novel about a game i like seeing the numbers, equip stats, player stats, dmg numbers and stuff like that. but having it all suddenly disappear for like 70 chapters only to have it reappear for like 2-3 chapters rlly grinds my gears(200 something chapters as of this review) most annying part is when u read the story it skips around and back like u forgot to mention something and just decided that all of a sudden it becomes canon. u cant be like "wow he just soloed a boss thats higher level than him" to all of a sudden "o hes not strong enough to take this boss on yet" inconsistency is the key if that was fixed id totally be onboard to continue reading but for now its a no for me.(** if this doesnt count as contructive criticism and gets deleted will be posting it multiple times till it doesnt)
So confusing, I’ve read for 4 chapters already but I still didn’t see anything related to reincarnation. Can anyone explain this to me? Appreciates.I give 5 stars to boost the novel for now, but if no explanation received, I will reduce it.Keep up with the good work. See ya.