"I don't have any money, but I have my life. Do you dare to come and take it?" — Okay, I need a minute. Han Yue just dropped this line and I was PHYSICALLY excited. This is the kind of dialogue that makes you want to scream at your phone screen in approval. The dialogue in these chapters is absolutely razor-sharp. Every character has such a distinct voice that you could tell who's speaking just from the lines. Old Lady Zhang's dialogue is all noise and accusation — "God damn it!" "You vicious woman!" "You spendthrift!" — she never stops screaming, and that's exactly the point. Her voice is chaos, and Han Yue's voice is ice. But what really impressed me is how the children's dialogue reveals everything. The youngest son just breaking down and saying "Wow, dad is bad!" — that's not written as some dramatic monologue. It's a kid who's been holding it together and finally can't anymore. And the second son's disgust — "He doesn't deserve to be our father at all!" — that's the voice of a child who's been watching his father betray the family and finally naming it out loud. The humor is perfect too. Han Yue telling Old Lady Zhang to "continue eating" her own poison breath, or when she says "Just think of her as accompanying the music" while eating dinner. These are the kind of witty, dry lines that make you laugh out loud. And Liumao the dog — "What is modesty?" — I'm not even kidding, I laughed so hard. The author gives this dog an actual personality through its grunts and barks, and somehow it works.
ooh its good alright although they are few mistakes am hoping the author would work on especially in the spellings
I’m not a writing professional but this was definitely one of the better novels I’ve read. Im pretty picky with most stuff I read and most novels on this app get dropped pretty early on since they are too boring, in comparison this novel is not bad at all. I picked this book up bc I felt like reading romance but despite that the story can perfectly stand alone fine without any romance. I’m giving this a 4.8/5 and out of the 20-30 novels I read most of this definitely makes it into the top 10
This Book is Really GoodPersonally I Recommend this Book to those who are Good with the Tags and the given Synopsis / DescriptionAUTHOR-SAN Please do tell that you haven't Dropped this Book?
Shameless 5 star author review, it would be nice if you could leave some reviews on what to improve on as it’s my first piece and I’ll be making more chapters soon
Good.
I’m at chapter 22 so far everything is good grammar is all right. Storytelling is amazing flow I enjoy it. It actually is one of my favorites now. I love how thy have a good consistency with showing the system. No joke it’s genuinely good. It doesn’t waste too much time. Their transaction is amazing compared to other novels where they add the most randomness things that make it confusing and it gets boring later on, but this novel is really good.
First chapter is stunning and well delivered; love the cat and the humor added just at the right moments.Keep it up; you have a great future writing
look promising novels man I am laughing at these funny chapters ?? man
free ratings. ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ ㅤ
recommended for anyone looking to lose themselves in the story
This novel is very wonderful, I advise you to read it ??