This book is great . I really love it. keep it up
Haven't quite read all of the chapters yet, but I am enjoying this so far!The Good: We have a unique story and world, and I personally love Mecha! The ensemble of characters is varied without everyone just being completely reliant on the MC. I am pleasantly surprised at how good the grammar is for a first novel.The Bad: Some chapters are completely in bold, others are not. We have a unique world with a lot of characters, but most of them are missing details, and so is the world. The plot feels rushed, and some of the character relationships are forced without any sort of history to back them up aside from the implied friendship of Ryker and Lyra. Basically, stating their teamwork would be unbeatable after assembling a team half a chapter ago is really hard to swallow.The Neutral: We're missing so many details, but this is your first novel and will be a good experience! Personally, I would like to see more of the world. What is the academy? What is the power source of magic? Why does everyone seem to know about the Shadow Games? I get that you have a story in your head and want to share it with others because you think they will enjoy it too. This is great! Just try and remember that we can only perceive what you show us. If you have the MC and his new teammates become best friends within half a chapter, it is possible, but show us. Lastly, the chapters get automatically numbered, so if the 1.5 chapter is like a glossary of sorts, put it in its own auxiliary volume and remove the chapter # from the titles so we don't keep reading things like "Chapter 14: Chapter 12: Tactical Training"
I did it. 100 chapters, over 100k words and 300+ pages. If I had to give a selling point it’s that the series itself is fast paced, most conflicts take a chapter or two to be over, unless it’s more important where it takes around 4, then a mini arc would be around a dozen or so.Another one is that while the Protaganist is OP, I’d say the charm is that they’re made to be the most kindest and understanding person, a contrast to most OP or even most MCs at all.The biggest selling point is if you like really intricate systems that are heavily based on esoteric Middle Eastern culture this is also for you, also if you like very in your face writing sometimes too.I would hope everyone enjoys it. I hope at some point this takes off so I can do my other projects as well.
Very interesting plot. I like that the MC somehow had a carefree attitude and relatable struggles. Great story, very engaging.
Honestly there are much worse novels in higher positions.It's perfect? no, some things about the protagonist, especially at the beginning, made me want to strangle him, however the writing and the sense of the world were noticeably improving, thanks also to a basis that, if it's true, didn't invent anything new, and it's also true that it didn't it lacked everything it needed to have a lot of potential.I hope the author doesn't let himself be demoralized by idiots who comment without even reading the work itself. At least this is what I seem to have perceived.The material is good and honestly those who only know how to criticize will hardly ever achieve anything, especially if such criticism is not constructive.
The concept of the story is very new to me, which is what I love about it. I love how the story begins, allowing the reader to dive right into the story and sail through the creativity crafted by the author. The author did a great job with the character design, and the story line is very fresh. I can't wait to read more. Keep it up, author!
"Ha ... " I sighed and watch the beauty view.
After a long 'chat' finally i was arrived at school.
"Yeah go take a rest, dont push your self Fritz."
"As much as we adore having you here, it was your daughter we wanted to speak with." Mrs. Heath said.
"How was it?" She asks.
Girl 2:Will be my boy??