I like the change up from the normal storylines. I feel for him as an AI, I would probably have the same issues if I was an AI. The flow and actions from one chapter to the next make it hard to stop reading. I ran across a couple minor grammar errors, but nothing to distract from the story.
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This novel is great and I recommend you try this. Grammar is good and the mc is evil or rather he will do anything for his goals and purpose. You will feel like you are watching a movie when reading this, the scenes are described well and the definitions are also great. As a ghost Negary is an evil existence that manipulates people to get the best of what a human can offer.
If you are looking for a tbate clone this is the book for you. But to be completely honest you’d be better rereading tbate. It doesn’t have a majorly different plot, so you basically already know everything that is gonna happen. Also it doesn’t do anything better than tbate only worse. The pacing is very off. It will introduce pieces of the plot that happened in tbate but it won’t go into nearly as much detail or spend as much time on it. Like the academy. Nothing substantial happens at the academy. It is like Hi ADADEMY time!! Ohhh they had classes 1 year later bad thing happens and academy ends. However, even though I have been dragging this book through the mud it isn’t a bad book. I mean I read it, but it just set my standards too high by comparing it to tbate. Like it has the plot elements and characters similar to tbate, but it doesn’t have the essence of what makes tbate tbate. Tl;dr: It shouldn’t of tried so hard to be like tbate, but still miss the mark.
A nice story that I would definitely come back to in the future. Usually, I would have a problem with the System in these kinds of stories, but that problem is fortunately nonexistent here. The only problem I would have is with the flow, as it gets somewhat rocky in certain parts. The chapters are also a bit too long for my liking, but that would differ from person to person. Overall, great job!