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Its good but in the later chapter, there is too much inner dialogue, many POV for just single moment, wasting many chapter for the same information in my opinion
I love this novel, but romance side is verryyyy low, like 210 chapters and they had only a kiss…but friendships and the plot twist is very interesting!
please continue almighty summoner system. it was very good and this one is too.
My friend is writing the story. I can't believe that it's his 1st time writing a story. for real man, you're great. I mean it's not even your 1st language. Good job man.
Amazing concept with a lot of potentialBut the author dropped and rushed the ending out of nowhere a bit disappointed but who am I to critique his decision to drop at least he finished his work
Let me start with a brief synopsis since the one at the top is... bad. Our main character, Qi Ming, wakes up in the body of a servant-disciple who is on the verge of getting kicked out of a powerful righteous sect. Because of that, the original owner of the body decided to become a spy for some demonic sect in exchange for pills that would increase his cultivation and let him stay in the sect. Then, enter MC, and the story goes from there with him trying to cut ties with the bad guys and climb his way up the power structure of the sect by using his golden finger to quickly increase his cultivation.That out of the way, here's my review:The first fifty chapters or so are... alright. The set-up I just described to you is fairly good and there is a decent amount of tension keeping the reader engaged as Qi Ming tries to navigate the sticky situation his predecessor left behind (he has to escape from the demonic sect people his predecessor was contacting, survive when they inevitably come and try to kill him, and also prepare for the sect assessment that will decide if he will be expelled or not). But once those initial threats are resolved the story takes a turn for the worse. MC stands out during the sect assessment, takes a powerful elder as his master, and finally gets assigned his cave abode.And, honestly, this is the point where the story kind of ends? You see, after this there's nothing but a series of timeskips where we get a list of all the cool items, powers, spells, and cultivation levels MC has been accumulating while "afk". Like, literally, it will say "...and then 4 years passed and MC obtained the blah blah blah..." and that will be the chapter.Honestly, I feel like the author sort of missed the point of an "afk system". In my mind, such a system would free the main character up to do things and go on adventures or whatever, but in this book the main character mainly just sits in his cave and lets time pass as he slowly gets stronger. And, honestly, when the main character just sits in a cave for years or decades on end to get stronger... isn't that just called cultivation? Why even have the conceit of an "afk system" if the MC is just going to do what every other cultivator has to do to get stronger?So basically, the book follows the format of: The MC spends a long time in his cave cultivating, he becomes very strong, he goes out to do one or two things (usually because the sect orders him to), he settles his tasks overbearingly with his OP main character powers, and then he goes back to cultivate some more. At first it's a few years at a time, but later we are skipping over decades, then centuries, with a few words.The author also keeps retconning and changing how the system works and how much MC needs to put in to keep it running. At the start it supposedly works like this: MC puts in some amount of spirit stones and his cultivation will increase at a rate of 10x normal without him doing anything, he can put in more spirit stones and increase the ratio up to a maximum amount. At the same time, he can simultaneously let a "game avatar" run a dungeon that the system generates which will drop items, cultivation techniques, and spirit stones. In the beginning, the dungeon runs aren't very profitable spirit stone-wise, enough to let him keep entering the dungeons and do a bit of cultivation, but not much more than that. Thanks to that, a big plot point in the early chapters in MCs struggle to get enough spirit stones to fund all the cultivation he wants to do, starting from begging his rich master and betting with his rich senior sister, and then moving on to him selling the items he gets from the system in his sect's market place, and then on to him using the system to master alchemy so he can create pills to sell at the market to steadily fund his cultivation (p.s. there author wrote zero scenes at the market, this all gets handled off-screen by one of MCs spirit pets). However, as MCs levels keep going up and the cost of running his system got higher and higher, the author finally realized that MC constantly selling hundreds of thousands or even millions or billions (in later chapters) of spirit stones worth of goods every single day at the local market is kind of unsustainable, so the "dungeon runs" started dropping enough spirit stones to fully fund his cultivation and also have a bunch left over, removing then need for MC to gather any resources and allowing him to fully rely on the system for everything.In short, this is a bog standard OP MC cultivation novel but with like 90% of the "struggling to power up" scenes omitted, leaving only the scenes where the invincible MC wanders around trampling his foes. Also, the author does that annoying this where whenever the MC is doing something impressive a dozen randos will pop out of nowhere and be like "Oh my god, is MC really trying to do that?" "That's impossible!" "No one could ever succeed!
This book has a lot of potential. The plot is very intriguing and characters are well written and real. I've only read up to 4 chaps which is not enough to give a detailed and decent review, but this book has been amazing till now and i hope it will be in the future too. And it seems that the author is new as well. I hope you will not drop this.
WHY WASN'T THIS BOOK CHOSEN?! PLEASE UPDATE THE THIS BOOK AND CONTINUE TRANSLATING IT!! IT IS SUPER GOOD! (ノ｀Д´)ノ彡┻━┻ f••k. I'm so angry. D:
Even though it's only 3 chapters it captivates me how he care for he's brother, the world background and the beautifully written chapters. I hope it stays like this as chapter's goes by. Like it and certainly added to my libray. Cheers for the upcoming adventures with Zaen! ?
Def. not 5 stars.Read lots of better stories.Feels hurried whilst missing half the iNformation that was supposed to be given to the reader.Also downright refuses commonsense.Ah i meed a gf ahhhh my roo,ate has decided i am to date his sister, since i am the most attractive student but did not know so myself, and so i go pick her up with a limousine, because i aM rich. did i forget That i am a noble? Yes? Well now you know.
Great Novel, there are to few good Basketball Storys Out there keep up the good Work! ?? _________________________________________________