Good writing: characters written with their own personality, plot keeps readers engaged Troph feels a little cliché
this is a good story, its worth to try reading this
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as of the latest chapter (80) I've noticed that the author seems to want to get away from a cultivation novel and I think it's a good idea especially because Cards are a great idea. and the way cards are used here is really unique I love it!
This book is very well written the only thing I hope is that it will be updated soon!
The writer has a strong skill in story writing.
Actually, I felt a little bored in the early chapters, but the author's descriptions and writing style helped me visualize everything in my mind. The more I read, the more interesting it became... Nice work author... I hope you can update every day...
Really fun novel. Short chapters but amazing plot line. Has great potential and am very much enjoying it ? definitely a recommended read :)
Going pretty well so far. Not giving it 5 stars as there is still room for improvement but definitely worth the read.
A peace of art, a very good story, love it ??
This is a good novel so far, above average for the genre in my opinion except for one problem that I have. I think the conflict developing with the military is a bit dumb. My first issue is, why would the military behave this way? I understand the mc, in my mind he’s basically a feral animal right now, he feels cornered by the world and like he can’t trust anyone but Charlotte, it’s really good and I’m enjoying it a lot. But this military thing could have played out a lot better, firstly we already know the doctor is working with the military as an informant right? So instead of kidnapping his sister like a bunch of idiots and 100% guaranteeing an antagonistic relationship with a future power house, all they had to do was tell the doctor to tell Arthur “I’m sorry but our treatments are not working, with the current technology and medicine that we have your sisters prognosis is approximately 4 weeks. However if you are interested, I have a friend in the military and they have some advanced treatments that could give her more time or be more effective in treating her, if you want I could talk to them for you. I have to tell you though, I’m only saying this because I can see you are a beta tester, this isn’t an opportunity you can buy with money or influence, I don’t know how strong you are but the military is looking for exceptionally strong beta testers. You would have to prove to them that you are worth the effort and investment but if you are strong and show your value, I am positive that they will at the very least be able to give you’re sister more time.” Any military tactician would have approached it more like this, the doctor is already an insider, instead of doing stupid stuff this would have made Arthur hungry for their help, he would be scared and not trusting but with no other choice he would go them and to make sure he doesn’t lose out on the chance to save his sister he would show them more of his power. Now there’s lots of ways to tweak this to make them fall out later and become enemies, have misunderstandings or whatever if you still want conflict to happen. But to me this is would have been a much smarter approach from the military and makes a lot more sense. Still loving the story so far though!
It’s very nice and terrifying at the same time. How the characters die is very amusing. Kinda reminds me of final destination. I hope you don’t ruin it Fonstine City.