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"Lady Oba, what are we waiting for? Why are we still not moving?" Camille asked impatiently. Her blood has been boiling, iching to get into a fight. This was her chance to show Lady Maria that she made the right decision in leaving her Guild. She wanted to show and prove that she has grown exponentially, but Lady Oba didn't pay her no mind.
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Echoes of Eternity is a captivating and imaginative tale that expertly blends elements of fantasy and time travel. The story follows young Ethan, who is given a second chance to right the wrongs of his past. With vivid descriptions and a gripping plot, this novel keeps readers on the edge of their seats as Ethan embarks on a quest to save his mother and alter the course of his destiny. The themes of regret, redemption, and the power of choice are thoughtfully explored, making this book a must-read for fans of fantasy and adventure. An enchanting journey that stays with you long after the last page.
I like the idea behind the story, but the writing quality is just too bad for me to enjoy it. The way it's written also seems kinda forced which ruins the plot quit a bit. I think if the author got someone to help edit the story it could be way better than it is right now.
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Since this novel is just out, I'll give my initial impressions. I think this novel is undoubtedly a novel that should be skipped or ignored if your an experienced or avid reader on this site. This novel is overly simplistic in its characters, narrative and story to its detriment. The mc is a Gary Stu. If you don't know what that means it's basically a male character who through The power of plot can do whatever The writer sets him out to do regardless if it makes sense or not. A normal man in modern times suddenly gets powers and can fight like an experienced fighter. Makes sense. Female characters instantly like him after a first encounter. Makes sense. Randomly geting a space ring full of wealth and knowledge. Makes sense. The writing clearly ignores these plot holes in its narrative. It's pearly wish fulfillment and I don't see that changing in the future of this novel. I would recommend this novel to first time readers of this genre or readers to this site. It's light hearted, easy to follow and simple. It will ignite a bit of interest in this genre and draw eager readers. Unless wish fulfillment stories that are written at a 6th grade(12 year old) writing level is something you generally enjoy. I advise to stay away from this novel. It's a waste of time.
Title is just ٩(˃̶͈̀௰˂̶͈́)و ╮ (￣ 3￣) ╭ alluring and stuff. Harem sounds good but I think it can improve but I’m not a professional so yeah~~~~~~~~~~ why did you stop writing completely??
I really like it, the characters don't feel like robots. Good luck!
Excellent style of writing and some thing amazing is at this age it's commendable. Author knows very well to describe the scene and shown a very good selection of words to describe it.Author has managed to create a great start and very eager to go though the balance chapters.
To be honest, this a great work with potential but i still feel like somethings are missing. These are my opinions tho: Character development; This is a wizarding world, the character is a wizard and i don’t know what u have in plan for the mc’s character but his current character really ain’t satisfying. For a wizard, a dark wizard at that, i feel he is a bit too emotional than he is supposed to be. He has some subtle naivity( calm + curiosity could do the trick regarding his inspiration talent)which is not good for him as a dark wizard who is pursuing the ‘information manipulation path’. He lack the ruthlessness, calculative/ schemic mind required. His control over his emotions is also a bit lacking and his will is a bit too weak for an earthling who hold secrets hidden in his memories which he definetly cannot afford for others to see. Also, he lacks insights into the human heart and mind which is will be fatal to him if no change is made. With his knowledge of novels he read on eath he should know better than anyone the consequences of letting too much emotions affect his cause. As a dark wizard, his thirst for knowledge, rational thinking and spirit for reseach into the mysteries of the the multiverse is weak.It’d be cool if he had some time powers added to his rune tho.He could also create his own A.I to help with his informational path.Also, about his information manipulation and will path, you can gain insights from “ Cyher in marvel comics”, “ the middle chapters of the novel; ‘Original Seeker’ on comrademao.com or mtlnovel.com. Agian these are just my thoughts if you deem them useless for what you have in store for your work you can ignore it.
This is definitely a must read. The pacing of the story is very well done. Not only does the author create a very believable world background, but builds up ******* and atmosphere that is expected of the genre.The characters so far are lively in their own sense and there is no lack of conspiracies and back stabbing potential for an interesting villain and protagonist clashes. Look forward to seeing this story through.