Hello, first thing first, I was overwhelmed by how you tried to describe the world and it's system. I was confused and had to try to read it again. There aren't many grammatical errors but try not using repeated words. You have a great plot, but your world background and character design needs improvement.
hmm how to say this... Let's see, it's normal for authors to be inspired by a story to create their own story. The problem was that the author was too inspired by TAP (The Author's POV). The beginning has several elements similar to TAP, and when there are so many similar elements, comparisons are inevitable. To be honest, if you read this story without knowing TAP, you will probably think: "hey, this is a good story". But if you know TAP... as I said, the comparison is inevitable. Let's start with writing. The author needs to improve in this area. It is readable but needs improvement. For me, who use google translate, the errors get worse. Reading the story I think Lucas is not an extra. Lucas is versatile using sword, daggers and powerful magic. He is OP. Lucas is not stupid but also not smart (compared to the MC of TAP). He works hard and trains a lot. He doesn't stay discreet for long. So far there are almost 0 human interactions with the other races. I hope there will be some change soon. At the moment, I believe Lucas is too stuck in the human realm. There are very interesting mysteries in the work about the protagonist's family, evil cults, super powerful beings, gods... This is very good.It seems the author is very wary of Lucas' interaction with other girls. It's as if the author thought: "Lucas is very hot. It's very difficult to write him interacting with other girls of his age without them throwing themselves into his arms". For example, Rose is Fredrick's love interest from the beginning. Nearly 200 chapters and Lucas' interaction with Rose is zero. I do not understand this. I really feel that the author is very cautious about including girls in the story. I don't know if this story will be a harem or not (I must admit that when the mc is as amazing as Lucas, with the potential to be the emperor of everything, I prefer a humble harem of 2 or 3 girls. After all, the good seed has to be spread hehehe The protanonist, the girls and humanity win and are happy) but I ask the author to include female friendships. Come on, aren't there any girls with potential that the mc wants to include in his group? This may even serve to make the princess feel some jealousy and realize her feelings for Lucas. To conclude, although the beginning has many elements similar to TAP, the author begins to take his own direction in the future in his work. I believe this story has good potential and that the author is getting better. It is very enjoyable to read and I recommend it to everyone. Just don't compare it too much to TAP and I guarantee you'll have fun reading it.I hope this review has helped in some way. Keep up the good work, author-san XD
I read up to chapter 50 (the paywall) and it's really good so far I really want to read more but cannot justify spending that type of money on webnovel. so I guess I'm dropping here. I recommend this if you have the 20 something dollars to buy the rest of it.
A really awsome book with well laid out characters and plot. Try reading it, you will not regret it. Thankyou for this awsome book. Enjoying it so far ?
Amazing world building concept and very well written, I liked everything about this story and looking forward to more chapters, great work ????
We're no strangers to loveYou know the rules and so do IA full commitment's what I'm thinking ofYou wouldn't get this from any other guyI just wanna tell you how I'm feelingGotta make you understandNever gonna give you upNever gonna let you downNever gonna run around and desert youNever gonna make you cryNever gonna say goodbyeNever gonna tell a lie and hurt you
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This Novel sat in my Library for quite a while because of the negative comments ... a month ago I thought about giving it a shot ... it's true the writing quality is bad but it has improved a bit with time. Character development took OKish but it still requires quite a brushing ..... But the most disappointing thing is the use of Heavy Plot Armours .. repeatedly.. Certain bets and terms /deals were used according to the wordings " you have to follow every command of mine / I will own everything you have if I win " and people readily agrees ( People are not that stupid and these are not ordinary people who we are talking about but powerhouses! ) without thinking the pros-cons of such a deal . Take example of Yanagi , a senior at his institute and most the powerful youth , readily agreed to the term " you will obey every command ... " if one could interpret , it is similar to a slave contract ! , ( My words ) , it should be properly mentioned what " everything" means in this novel - everything could include ones money , property , Mana Fruits , and Weapons but it can also include ones time , body , soul , his wife / husband and family... a clear cut defination is Very much required .. And don't talk about the Plot Armours... if one is giving it a try.... they will surely understand what I mean ...While the chapters are relased frequently , this story is not my Cup of tea ...Dropping it ..
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