WarningStory is full of face slapping
Gaston reminds me of king in opm
In the beginning it was church now it jump to exploring the universe which then leads to a crowd of side characters gathered together, the MC isn't really introduced all that much, the only thing we know is his name
A beauty introduced into first chapter but its not a "jade" beauty along with a lot of inspiration from other works
it can engage a reader who isn't all that curious and want to waste time. Even the outlines of bolding words, exclamation points (!) actually feel like we're inside the author creation.
Although the mona building isn't really describe how big it is until a few chapters later.
I would say as someone who spent the first few chapters reading it can really engage you to a world of likable fantasy.
Some scenes like magician ones could using clapping to draw attention of the background character in front of them or those around them when they're yelling/scolding others for mistakes
However in chapter two there is 2 random bolded texts that were suppose to be inaudible, what is this about?
In chapter 3, romance is in the works. This kind of engages more plotline depends on how you view/build it
I like how you introduced assassins who hide with cloaks on.
I get your trying to switch povs a lot, I think labeling that pov from side pov to MC pov may be a good idea to not confuse readers
Other than the first few chapters in, you are doing well so for on your novel.
Why not change the title to Manaless Magician? Manaless Mage sounds a bit not suitable imo
take my review with a grain of salt before you start reading it, for it has been close to 8 months since I last read anything of importance.basic sotry bream down, dude gets thrown out, dude gets thrown to the future, dude figuers out problem from future, dude gets thrown back to present with slightly more power to stop future.rinse and repeat 4ish times, right after it stops making sense. include some girls and escapades, some money making shenanigans that makes zero sense.NEXT MAJOR STEP: world swapperoo nonsenseSome people from other world break in, cause damage, MC appears from nowhere land, beat em up bad, then gets power boost after fight when it matters not. Dude then gets thrown over to a special world, dude gets embarrassed again because he is stronger then everyone and it's put on display, (insert everyone losing about 120 IQ PER A CHAPTER) everyone is now brain dead, and starts making fun of mc, no memorable face slap or anything, they just kinda slide into nothing land. Dude then goes to hotel, kills some people, uncovers a cult, then recovers cult so no one really deals with it. (insert power creep nonsense, except all power funnels into MC because it's "cool") dude is training with his wives, then plot hole, then quick patch over hole, some nonsense about being to powerful and destabilizing worlds because dude has no sense of control but can still insert into his wives cause plot hole. enough of that, I need to get back to my day.
I love it! Probably one of the best up start harem novels out. Fear not for the unlikeable tropes are simply a tease. Most of them for me anyway.
Player come and goManager come and goOwner come and goBut fans its for lifeYNWA bro!!!
Too much details , and too long till the real synopsis
pretty good book..... it's nice for a change,and would have loved it more had it more chapters.
Such a great novel, it deserves five star.
Ok, so the syposis was enough to get me started?..Werewolves, demons and assassins are my kind of stories?..Looking forward to what this story will turn out to be..Best of luck?
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