Wow, just wow. I feel like this novel needs an urgent rewriteAuthor seems to skip cause and go straight to effect In his writing style, completely ignoring the glaring plot holes and lacking character motivations in the process. This is not to say the character concepts are terrible, just their execution. You cannot claim a character acts a certain way, ignoring all common sense due to a deeply ingrained trait, and then frivolously deny it the very next chapterSpelling and Grammer is OK but it is incredible sloppy writing that butchers this story, suspension of disbelief in this story=non-existantAll in all the story goes the way it does solely because the author decrees it, not because the characters have any real personality.
Women are apparently objects, idiot's, or something to be concurred. MC is entitled, arrogant, and just poorly written. There could be a good story if you look past the poor writing and horrible MC but over all I say it needs to be re written.
The writing quality is not bad. I loved the prologue and the intro. It was intense and heart-wrenching. But you should write "I am" instead of just writing "am..."The characters were interesting too. You did made effort to introduce each character individually, giving them more depth. I liked the flashbacks of some characters which showed their depressing past, as it made them more 'real'.You are doing great, and I'm sure you can improve even further! ?
Very good book! I love the dramatic start, as it makes me want to see how it turns out. Hope there is more chapters to come, and soon cause I love it so far! ??
This will forever remain one of my favourite stories. It's just so amazing. Have I read stories with better writing? Yep. Have I read stories with better world development and magic? Yep. Do those stories have the same character and personality and emotion and charm that this one has? Nope! Okay well maybe a couple but still! It's so engaging and so brilliant and I love it to bits. Thank you for this journey. Thank you for writing this. I'll keep following it and I don't think anything now can make me not love this any less than I do now.
it's interesting. the novel is a kind of eastern fantasy and western elements but really entertaining. I can recommend it for new readers looking for a new book to read.
Neon was shocked, of course, he was aware of the approaching knight examination. he just didn't feel concerned as he wasn't an apprentice knight and had zero chance to be participating in it.
