Tonight Will Begin - Reviews

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A couple of years passed by, civilizations all over the world Irrila developed rapidly. Magus could be used by common people as they grasped the basics of Alchemia, albeit it was very weak compared to the pure elemental Magus of Avraerion.

"I assume you're here for dinner, right?" I see her nod while looking at the floor. "We're coming. We'll talk about that school while eating." As I say that, we see her scamping off towards the kitchen. We look at each other and smile.

WF Chuuni: "Another Schnee monster! You'll pay for what you have done to my brothers and sisters!"

dad: huh, oh ya sorry to wake you guys.

[Anatomy:Human](Passive)[Lv.1 Exp. 0/10]

"Say princess how long you gonna be here"

Not giving her a chance to answer, Shen Yi pushed her into the shower stall fully clothed. Her arms automatically wrapped around his neck, pulling his head down for a kiss. Her moans drowned under the torrent of water above them.

" sir if i may , I would like to teach this recruit some military regulations "

"Yes Mrs," said Mamat.

I only read up to chapter 11.In my opinion this novel have potential, not bad.But i don't like the story because author use 3rd person perspective, just try to count how many times author write "Evan" in a single chapter, personally i don't feel connected to the story because of this.Also i feel like author need to use more punctuation, i notice author rarely use coma (,) sign on his story which made the paragraf feel chaotic.I also don't like how author do chapter 1, the sacrifice part on chapter 1 is unnecessary for me, and its better if you put it in chapter 10.In my opinion you made chapter 2 to chapter 9 as a flashback is a bad choice.I mean why would you give readers an 8 chapter long flashback right from the start? its unnecessary, everyone can literally read chapter 1 and jump to chapter 10 immediately and can still understand the story.Its a bad start in my opinion.You should know that you need to make the story as interesting as possible on early chapter to make people stay and hyped for the next chapters, but here i am dropping on chapter 11 before even i know mc new power after the sacrifice.I hope my review can help you to get better.good luck author.

I’m really loving the diabetic romance, been looking for something like this. I’m very early on in the book so I hope the writing quality improves later on. I could really use some art to help picture what the characters look like. Also author can you please add some r-18 scenes too. It would just make it so much better. Now I hate r-18 scenes when there’s too many for no reason. But in moderation it makes reading so much more enjoyable. Like in this WN. I’m on like chapter 38 as of now and I hope they kiss soon