This story makes Zero sense...1 second Mc is a Idiot in another he is sherlock and the storyis just unrealistic........................................
Story's so far is very well written with a believable progression and realistic life for the MC. Would recommend for anyone who's looking for a good system novel to hold you over until any new updates.
WOW! What a great story! Very well written and very well thought out. I was shocked by the twist! Well done!! Characters are well developed and interesting!
First of all you have an awesome vocabulary and very different writing style. The plot itself is very different which caught my interest from the very first chapter and I love the attitude of the main character.
The idea was good. The execution was terrible. The MC is nothing but a child. The plot is predictable and downright cliche. There isn't really anything that makes me want to read more
After the ejaculation which continued for about a minute finished, I extracted the penis from the loli anal which held it to the root, and a large amount of semen which was slightly late shot out and stained the sheet
