This story can be summarised in one word: drama. Really, the plot, the characters the setting... it's all been done before and better somewhere else. If this story were food it would be bread with no spread.Now I'm not saying it's bad, it's all written rather well, but I can't get myself to care about anything, because I know it will be needlessly dumb, needlessly cruel, needlessly unrealistic and I'll get all this tension built up and the reward will be 'meh'.Unrealistic coincidences and permanent bad luck are only really fun if it's in a comedy or a satire. In a serious story it just tired you out unless the plot handles it well.