The premise of the story is very interesting! I’m loving the main character so far. There aren’t many chapters but the author has a creative way in stringing the world together.The author has a great usage of vocabulary and isn’t too repetitive. They’re grammar is also better than most writers on webnovel as well. Although the average grammar on webnovel is already bad to begin with so it probably isn’t saying much. Your grammar is good, but not great. Your good use of vocabulary helps immensely and didn’t tire me out which is a plus.My biggest issue is the long sentences. Areas where you could hv put a fullstop, is immediately continued with a another sentence. A whole paragraph could be one long sentence. I could hardly remember what I just read.It’s better to cut down some sentences short. Long sentences are not always better. Sometimes short sentences give more impact.Also, the average reader can only remember up to 6-7 words, 10 at most. And as you get better, it increases. However, the average reader on webnovel aren’t even native english, let alone very focused. So putting fullstops when needed should be taken into account.
