Regret.. - Reviews

Really quite enjoying this! Loving the daily updates :)

I like it so far looking forward to more chapters..................  ........     ....................... ..................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ............................  ........     ...................

Its great so far should give it a try.............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

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Overall, story isn't bad. Plot seems believable, but some parts are kind of rushed. Please get a good editor and fix all those grammar mistakes - don't just use google translate or thesaurus. Also, don't drag out and mansplain too much.

"Why do you have to ruin my moments, system? You always do this to me." Julius said with some depression.

Aurora:'What do you mean, sweety?

Her smile was beaming, Karma thought as his eyes became fixed on her.

Amanda throws the man to the wall as the man fainted

Jin turns around and flips him the bird

Well, the years start coming and they don't stop coming