Constructive criticism, hope you don't take it badly. First though - I like your novel. It has enough difference from other novels of the same type, yet keeps lots of the things you would love from those novels. Fast paced, timely updates. I enjoy reading it. However, you write your story like it's a draft of the actual novel. Similar to how an author would prepare the points and events you want in a chapter before writing the actual thing. I'm not saying to write "filler" and "fluff" material just to flesh-out the chapter. I'm glad this novel does NOT do that, but you need to develop situations and events more. Practice that, then do it on this novel, and I think you'll grow as an author, and have a great novel on your hands. Lastly - I'm going to vote for your novel. I think it has massive potential
