In my opinion you have a nice idea but poor world background building,no proper foundation was made and it seemed rushed. No detailed explanation on your country's history, not everyone is versed in your country's history?
Is it me or is chapter 3 similar to the beginning of The Desolate Era? It quite literally has the same words but different meaning like "perception" and "spiritual sense". Did the author take inspiration from Desolate Era????
Beginning was a bit rough, it seems you are getting better at writing. Less run-ons and camma errors. I like the charcter ideas, but at the beginning you were going everywhere. Now it seems more solid, I would like to read more.
Good and epic book that keeps readers interested to find out what happens next .. love the vampirism everyone has to give this a read and vote for it and help make this book come money.
a good story spoilt by excruciatingly slow releases. the translator should do everyone a favour and cede the project to someone who is committed to translating. ordinarily this would be forgivable in a purely fan based translation project. but when its clearly monetised, its extremely frustrating
