Experimental - Reviews

even though it is system novel you tried to change story line from other system novel and story plot also good

This is not a review,perhaps?Lol i just want to recommend this story .It has a great potential ,Not overpowered at all but still the protagonist had enough of power to beat bad guys and tame beauty(ies?)As the MC is growing up the flow also make every chapters become interesting.

Okay so. I'm only in the first few chapters but I have to say: this is really so disappointing. I've heard that the grammar and stuff gets fixed later on but how the hell does that help the early chapters?Those chapters really need to be edited and gone over by someone so it doesn't drive off all the new people who are attempting to read this novel seriously.The fact that you've made this novel into a premium where we require the use of Ss's or fast passes to read is just a freaking disgrace. If you would go back and edit your starting chapters maybe then you'll be able to retain a decent amount of people.From looking through all of the grammatical errors and mistakes, the story actually looks interesting and something I'd enjoy. So, I'll continue reading on and try to push until the edits start showing up. But yeah, I recommend you get your stuff together and fix your older chapters or at least get rid of your premium so that we don't have to pay to read a story with mistakes. Thank you for taking the time to read my review.

I really like this story. Yeah, maybe I shouldn't say so, because the stories that I like haven't been doing too well lately. Anyway. The Protagonist—Parr Skystar—has a magic short sword. Every time that he kills something, he absorbs life-force directly through the sword, allowing him to level up rapidly. Yeah, I don't know if it is just me, but the parts where the Protagonist levels up are my favorite parts of the story. Of course, you can't have a cake of nothing but icing—well, you can, but then it isn't cake—just candy. The level ups are fast, but not monotonous—and since he has to chose WHICH ability to level up, that also adds some texture. I REALLY HOPE this story gets picked!

And again what is with the manditory 140 characters for a review. The book has been great so far and is quite intersesting. (Seriously 140 characters)

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The rest of the day burned by and I headed back to Oneka-senpai's house. Surprisingly easy to navigate to her house, after all you can't miss the mansion between the houses. Oneka-senpai said that and Mia-san and her would stay after school so I would have to walk home alone. I found the spare key hidden in the roots of the shrubs next to the door. It was strange to be in such a large house alone. At least with Oneka-senpai and Mia-san there was at least some life, but with them gone, it was dead silent. I went up to my room and unpacked my stuff. I took off the toilet paper and looked at my arm. I  traced the arrow shape with my left hand. I took the crystal out of my pocket and looked at it.

The sun shined directly onto my face and woke me up. Oneka-senpai and Mia-san were starting to wake up. They twisted and turned, groaning. When Mia-san moved, I quickly slipped out my left arm. My left arm was asleep. Oneka-senpai turned around again to face me. I slowly turned my head to the right. Oneka-senpai's eyes were wide open and looked directly into mine.

He sure have his own plans, but he won't share it with his brother. In his mind, Shen Zhe was thinking about how their father was right, Shen Li is straight as a stick. Their family have fallen into the deep pit, their father and baby sister were gone and the eldest still want to praise them?

There were 10 soldiers surrounding a large area which is a site dug by civilians, for soldiers with the purpose only known to them.

MY ARM!