Alpha Titus (editing) - Reviews

It is like a drug. You know that the story is bad but you cant help but crave for more. Too bad the ending is so rushed..........................

I really hope this get picked up.  ……………………………………………………………………………………..……………………………………………………………………………………..……………………………………………………………………………………..

Why does the story feels like it change after chapter 109 . Like a whole new world . Did I miss something or?

( this is for new readers that wants to knew what they are approaching on?, also this is a redone, because my review got deleted, so here it's again ?)let's begin with the raosting.........hmmmm, why isn't there anything to raost about ?, all I could find is..--- firstly, the story's development, everything is in its place, the story isn't too fast nor too slow ??.--- secondly, the characters, every one of them has his own mystery, that you can find its solution with every new chapter ??.--- thirdly, the updating stability, it's just perfect, either daily or sometimes, day yes and day no but, that happens rarely ??.--- fourthly, the world background, for the first time it seems like your regular and boring wuxia novel but, wahahahah? let me say that you are for a very massive and thicc surprise, my fellow cultured civilian ?.--- finally, the MC ?, the MC is not your stupid, dense, heroic and Nobel MC? nor completely third rate vilian, no he knows what he is doing ( sometimes ?), slightly manipulative andknows when to say a joke to make it more funnier ? ( a level above Peter Parker ).aaaaand that's all I could find, and I'm sure that in the future it will be a piece of art ??, because this is the type of author that upgrades his story and opens new possibilities with every new chapter ??, and I will always be waiting for the updates of the story and its author ?.                      ___peace out___

This story has immense potential, writing wise it is very good. Pacing is kind of off sometimes and either needs to slow down in some cases, or is just going too fast. These are just minor things that the author can get better at quickly. As for update stability I cant say much yet as there are only 4 chaps. Worldbuilding is solid along with character design. Cheers!

A chill was sent down everybody's spine. Although everyone knew that they would only be able to delay the intruder, they didn't expect him to directly go for the king. The man, if one could even call him that, was holding the king's life at the palm of his hands.

"We got a report earlier that there was someone sneaking around in the perimeter, later we found some guards unconscious like this. "

Kai smirked at the sight of her. He got another blanket and pillow before walking into the bathroom. He unfolded the blanket that as covering and laid in it next to her. He then placed the his the blanket over them. Making himself comfortable he brought her into his embrace, she snuggled closely into his chest and he slowly fell asleep.

                            Claire POV

Today was the day that the beta for Crimson World is released.

A man with white hair and red eyes is in the Executive Capital Planet and is standing up in a huge office look and wandering his mind about his civilization. Suddenly a hologram appears in front of this person.  The hologram is another man with white hair and red eyes and is standing at attention.

​Toby smiled for a second knowing that he had just made this older woman's day with just asking her a simple question that had no real bearing on his life in any way. As he looked at her she ushered him inside knowing that is he didn't hurry out the door then Katlyn would be on her way up. She pointed out the suit that he had wanted to have laid out for the day and she hustled away.