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The story moves like a snail crawls, extremely slowly,however I really like the quotes at the end of the chapters. Also, author, please get an editor

Hey we are really expecting this story to get picked and look at this even after this many times are it's first pilot read dubut the editor still hasn't uploaded the views of the readers of this book on its page

I like the antagonist, his fat body. Typically antagonists for this type of things are much more annoying and crap, but this novel's antagonist is strictly his big belly.

I want this to be picked please.I want more chapters more chapters more chapters more chapters more chapters more chapters more chapters more chapters

I really like the young MC. He is lovable character who wants to help everyone around him. Who couldn’t fall in love with that? The story drops you into the action from the beginning and you feel like you are struggling right along with Einar. Well done!

Okay, here we go. Your entry was a bit of track but you got back into the story when he went back in time. I saw u tried to add a bit of pink atmosphere with him noticing things only the bent will. But the best friend character still needs more of a personality fill in. I mean is he dominant, timid ,etc. I need this expressed in him every action. Well i can't wait for your updates