Okay author-sama. So I feel like you have a solid idea for a story. However you messed up on world building way to quickly and try to make up for it later. You also need to fix your system of using (him, her, I, our, them, they) if you wish for a better story you need to stay away for using (I). It makes your story unreadable. Got to chapter 40. I hope you can review what you written and maybe make a rewrite so the story flows better because I believe you have a solid plot that can make a good story. Hope my review helps in anyway.