The story has a lot of potential, but it is wasted in a easily evitable way.The most common problems are:- LOL.- The author explain as something work just to forget it and making it work in a different way.- Irrealistic or dumb plot device (alert minor spoiler, jump to the next point if you don’t want know: an explosion that erase 75 square km of the city where the mc is, but he says he doesn't know anything because he didn't watch the news and he was at a friend house, friend that previously he said was in the same city. To not add that even though the explosion happened in a residential district there were just 67 deaths).- Expression used in the wrong way.Although I may sound harsh (both here and in the comments) I don't want to offend the author, but just point out thing that in a much needed rewrite should be corrected.As said before the novel has a lot of potential and it sadden and annoy me to see it wasted.I hope to not have offended or upset the author with this review or my other comments.
