Keep Out - Reviews

all the good reviews are of people who literally admitted to never reading the novel, it's so slow paced it's unbearable

STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS! STOP LETTING IT BE ON HIATUS!

This novel is bland. I don't like any of the characters personalities present at all. The way people are reacting and communicating is disappointing as well. I was intrigued at the start of the novel since it's somewhat similar to Overlord. Once they reached the tavern that's when I started disliking the story. You could have done some world building, develop their personalities,or push us to in the direction that this is a real world and not some game.      From what I seen is a novel that makes no sense. The emotions and the reactions of the MC feel forced and cringy. Once they started the dungeon the story just turned to hell due to the revive function and vampires. Sorry but If your just going to make the MC some powerhouse with slaves and have a revive function then story is not going to go far unless you want to make a average novel that's filled with readers that praise your novel for having an OP character with a harem.     If you want to improve as an author you need to compare the emotions and world building of your work with great novels that are similar to the genre of yours.

Everything was good until the character Día came into play. Story started deviating towards something unknown and narrow. I only wish the story will be good in future. But the story seems to be out of my play. World background is not clear and sudden appearance of characters make it hard for me to follow. The characters don't have any substance but they are there in the story.

Ok, so the synopsis itself is eye-catching and attracted me to the story. The grammar is fine and well written, I await how the story will turn out to be!!!

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He tried breathing in with his nose and out with his mouth to keep himself calm, but this had little effect. As he tailed Reitz, downing their thirteenth chimeraan a boulder flew by.

This novel is the proof. We need more science fiction on WN.OR the author can just give us poor souls more chapters. That will work too. Yeah, I think I don't need more sci-fi. Just more chapters pls...

"Besides, who said I was fighting you alone?" Yamamoto questioned.

"those weapon, is that yours" he asked her, seeing her holding the weapon like that makes his fighting lust raising high.

"Ash, I may not now your circumstances but this time, I do have a conclusive proof that you are no murderer. You save them! Why can't you remember?"