Forbidden Desires: A Targaryen Tale - Reviews

This story had lots of potential until 1. author created a ridiculous plot armour that keep saving him in critical situations and the plot armour makes no sense2. The main character have little emotion doesn’t3. The main character is a saint who never kills those who wants to kill him4. The academy makes no sense i feel that it holding him back he shouldn’t have join the academy5. The story is repetitive for example there some crazy villain who are jelous of him and want to use everything in his power to destroy him but after heing defeated by the protagonist a few times the become protagonist underline which makes no sense as they have powerful backings who can literally destroy the protagonist6. The villain are brain dead they have many ways to make mc suffer and destroy him but they chose the most idiotic way which is to fight him one by one head on I feel like the villain can kipnap his aunt and threaten him that would make it more interesting

I read 80 chapters and I can say this novel has a lot room for improvement. For beginning... Let's start with MC, he spent 400 years in hell... I guess it killed most of his brain cells. Zero research about 'hunter' actions before becoming one. If not plot armor, his stupidity would kill his family. Writing quality needs some editing. Some typpos here and there. Some sentences are quiete broken. WQ - 3 stars. You should consider editing your story before putting it before pay wall. None likes paying for being proof reader...SU - 4 stars. Story dev. - 3 stars. It's okay... Ruthless protagonist trying to improve his family situation and acts like wuxia protagonist killing random guy son. Blah blah blah. It could be avoided with some brains.Character design - 2 stars. It's probably weakest side of this story. Most of characters are cliché or bland. World background - 4 stars. Currently it feels like default Korean novel.This rating might improve if you make things better later in story. This review is based on free chapters. Maybe, you started to put more effort after getting contracted. I will visit later... No money for spirit stones and run out of passes. I hope this story improves. Good luck.

I dont knowHere goes a 5 starThank you

One of the best if not the best Star Wars fanfic on this site that I've read The only problem that I have is the stability of updates that are three ⭐⭐⭐ at bestAnd it's a little bit fast paced almost to fast paced Please don't drop and keep up the good work author

Is a thrilling adventure but focuses more on the amenities the system provides such as food instead of action if you like reading about a man in the apocalypse driving around without problems or the need to procure anything for survival this is for you

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A very well written story it maybe a bit generic and cliche but it definitely has a depth to it cant wait for more. All the best to the author for making this master piece

I’m on ch 15 currently and this is genuinely one of the most well-written novels that I’ve read on this app. Good job author.

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mc gets cucked lol ... reviews get deleted well kinda obvious with only 20..............................,.....................................

Hey author i really really liked your work and I'm not kidding it's my one of the best novel and I really liked it's just that could you please read it ?Is our MC's black heavenly fate value of only show ?? the way I see it's only decoration and nothing more for me it looks like you nerfed him i haven't seen any use of that it can't even help him fight against protagonists even a little bit let any luck encounter and the protagonists who came or will be coming if their heavenly fate value decreases then heavenly fate's tactics should also decrease and give some leeway to our character right? why why why you are nerfing him so much, I'm not complaining about you should directly make him op I'm just saying as heavenly fate value decreases of protagonist then make it somewhat easy for character and the second way you nerfed him in is Villain Points bruh you always give him pitiful villain points like in system mall the prices are skyhigh for anything he wants ??