It is a good story with some cliche parts, like every fantasy story, but it feels like there are many unnecessary parts and some conversations that are forced or unnecessary or dragged out.Overall I like the story and the slow development, but the conversations between characters doesn't feel smooth for me (don´t know how to describe it), but I will stick around and see how it turns out!Good luck!
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This novel is one of the few good ones out there. I have been following it for quite a long time and I have to say although there is mistake in grammar here and there it still puts the point forward. I saw that few of the authors of other novel are Saying he copied their novels and I don't really see where though, if its just the lewd scenes that's although kinda bad but its not something irredeemable. So author-san really love your novel don't worry about those people and continue your work.
Sounds interesting looking forward to a weird type of apocalyptic shop novel. ..............................................................
Good.Read it.
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I really liked your description and synopsis. The story line is quite attractive. I think you write quite well so keep on writing and update soon
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This book is amazing! I love evry single detail in it. The way that the story just flows isn’t choppy and since it’s not choppy I love it. And you don’t really get straight to the point you just lead up to it which makes me want to read even more.Overall this book is just 100/100 it’s just amazing! ???
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