Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.
bahasa nya bagus bgt apalagi memiliki banyak ras yang keren keren parah gk bisa ngebayangin deh kalau semisalnya ada di dunia nyata/*plak/ author dgn tingkat halu ?ku masukkan ke dalam perpustakaan, oh ya sedikit saran alur sudah mantap tapi perbaiki tanda baca lagi ya kak ?
it is another cliche novelFL finance will betray with her sister then meet a driver and get married for immediate cure (from her sister plot) after using ML she will fly to overseas become pregnant and come back to look for driver ML (as her child want dad)pretty much after solving all misunderstanding and face slapping they will live happily with their child I still don't understand why she would run away tho. she would have just told the ML when she was pregnant and had a happy family.forgot to mention ML is not driver but a big business man only our FL will misunderstand as driver
so i read to the most recent update which is like ch 178 and let me tell you, the story is pretty solid. first of all let me tell you about the "cliche" things that you would expect from stories like this.1 you start the first chapter with him getting the MacGuffin and from a person who can't cultivate "trash" (i so hate that word) to a cultivator) the good thing is that we don't hear any keep saying "how did that trash win so and so, i can't believe this TRASH got so powerful". he gets into a good cultivating faze quickly.2. he meets a few "young masters" but for the most part they either get trashed right away without any focus on them or they are actually logical human beings who aren't that stupid and as of now there has been only 1 stupid young master and the story makes it a point to show you how dumb or at least illogical that person was3. yes the MacGuffin that lets him become a strong cultivator makes him need more resources than other people. for now, it hasn't been that annoying.4. yes he goes from one area to the other with a wholly stronger region where his power level is at the bottom...well not really, more like lower-middle and good for his age. plus it's not like the author is pulling these power levels out of his ass, we kinda knew from the start that the area he is in and the one he moved into recently is still just the start to the middle level.5. he meets a girl but guesses what he doesn't fall in love with her on first sight but on the second time...sarcasm aside it didn't go as super fast as in other Chinese novels where girls just start ovulating like crazy just by seeing the mc. also she is smart to know how her beauty might bring trouble to the mc so she wore a vail when they went to a new place without any power backing them. I actually like this girl and she has been consistently logical.different things than the norm, mc is actually smart without him or the author constantly telling he's smart (when most probably they are stupid) it's not like he plays 5D chess against his enemies but he knows how and when to kill without bringing trouble to himself or his people.fight scenes are good, the leveling system has been solid and pretty standard I would say.for now, there isn't much you can hate the story on and the grammar is pretty on point.