the novel portrayal of character is so fine
This is my first novel so i kind of lack experience, so I want all of you to help me if you don't like anything in the novel and i will do my best to reach your expectation as my review I will only say this I want to write something that after reading it you all have a feeling that the time you give to read was worth it for you all and as for my rating atleast as a author of this book I can have little privilege to be shameless and give it a 5 star.
So far it is a really good start and I'm looking forward to the next chapters ?
I like it so far, very unique from the common novels you’ll see here and the chapters are plentiful
I like how the story starts, and it seems to me that for now, the story doesn't pull punches as much as the average story would, which I like, I also like how well the Nameless boy(aristellus?) is portrayed, he's childish, but he also has the maturity of a traumatized child, which is like, keep cooking AuthorDidgeridoo out
Truly, I do enjoy this story.This is not a string of words. Nor is it some form of half made concept. This is a fully fledged novel, with every word making you wish to read more. Many times, I'll catch myself with a grin on my face as I read a chapter. It is simply great.It contains neither powerful heroes or some terrifying opponent from the depths of villainy. This is far simpler than any of these stories.So come, join me in this review as I describe to you exactly what form of immersive entertainment this is.First off, the writing quality. When you read this story, you won't be searching for mistakes or laughing when you find them. No. You will be far to busy as your eyes flick from paragraph to paragraph, hanging on to the dialogue and the development of C's odd reality. Words are rarely wasted in this novel, and though during certain scenes of exposition may find yourself questioning why the author is restating something, I cannot say it is that much of an issue. They are minor things, but not enough for me to have any true problems with it.As for the update stability? Don't rely on this novel for daily entertainment. If there is something here that Parmesan truly fails at, its the ability to pump out chapters on a daily basis. When considering when the next chapter of this novel may come out, one must not think quickly, one must think eventually.Story Development. It is slow. To an unreasonable degree. Many things about this novel are quite good but the flow of time is a unrealistic crawl. The developments that happen in the one day we have so far experienced, could have happened over the course of a week. Parmesan is very dead set on making sure we know everything about everyone by the end of the one day that still has not passed. It's unnecessary, character development in the future could possibly be sped up by this, but that could've been done as we went along. Instead we have been limited to a bunch of small introductions which may end up reaching all the way to chapter 40 if there are more heroines to explore. If I were to do it, I would have had us learn things about the characters as they did them, exploring the motivations behind their actions as they put them forwards, while explaining the necessary basis of their personality to make sure it doesn't slow down these developments. All in all, it could have been done much better, without the stifling stagnancy we currently have to deal with.On the other hand, the character design that we have been provided with through this unreasonably long opening arc has been Stellar! Each character has their own personality that is held by a base trait. Kurokawa is dark seeming, while Rachel is a greedy b****** who wants nothing less than absolute ownership of her partner. Laura is a seeming strict class president, while C is supposed to be a simple weak mob, complaining about the popular kids. They all have something down at the base one can remember. If they were in a normal slice of life they could still excel as they are. However they are not. They are all within a yandere Eroge. They have nothing but the greatest setting to make use of their personalities. C our main character, is not a plot device as many main characters normally are. He is a catalyst for others. His trait that makes him ideal is the way he interacts with the readers, explaining and exploring the past of his environment and the things in it. He is the perfect window into the story because he knows every nook and cranny of it. And as the sentience granting bug grows and disrupts the world, he is capable or realizing all the things that are off and drawing our attention to them while showing us what it should have been like. He is our connection to the world, and as such he makes an amazing protagonist. On the other hand, the heroines we have been introduced to have certainly been standout. However they simply haven't done anything due not having the chance to. They have potential, but are locked in this single stagnant day that Parmesan refuses to end. Thus I can't really say much about them besides the fact that their existence is simply minimal due to the fact that they have little impact. So what if Rachel does some scary stuff in the past. It was explained to us. That takes away any fear we may have of her. Kurokawa is the very same. The reason many of the readers like laura is because we get to see things as she does them, and explore her interactions with C as they happen. She is a character who properly exists and grows with the story. The others simply don't get that chance. This is another of Parmesans failures that I hope to see rectified in the future.Finally, we have the world background. That stagnancy I have been complaining about wasn't completely bad. There were some things that were made better because of it. And that's the world background. Worlds and Stories are built on their lore. Both the lore built by the present characters, and beings of the past who allowed them to exist. In this case, the beings of the past are the characters of the present, so all of the interactions and situations spoken of feel in tune with the rest of the world. On the other hand, the world they live in is a game, simplifying the process of building a world that may have under normal circumstances required a massive info dump to understand. Certain things just aren't explained because they either don't exist or anyone can just figure it out. The world is simple. It's not deep, old or waning. It's new, fresh, and based off of logic put together by the author. Here the real world simply doesn't apply, and that's why the story is incredibly immersive.Its one of the reasons I love the story. Anyways, I enjoyed reading up to this point.I now await your return.
Beautiful is the perfect word for this story .A story of two teenagers who help each other pull through the trails and tribulations they both go through
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Author I really liked your Story. I hope that you will not leave the novel mid away and am waiting for the new chapters
It's very good novel and the translation is to notch, but when is the hiatus over?
A really authentic plot with a never read before storyline. A promising story with time-tested friendship, strong and dynamic characers and not your typical gods and goddesses. A must read, exploring the various themes of vengeance, suspence, thrill, reincarnation, time-tested friendship, forbidden love and a heartfelt sibling bond. The story is very delicately yet powerfully woven upon the essence of magic. The story revolves around winter who after having gone through all trials of life, finds himself killed by his best friend and reincarnated as Orion. Will he finally find out the reason for his chance at life again and save his best friend Yuui before it's too late or be trapped by his own alter ego forever? Will the secrets kept in the dark ever see the light or be forgotten in the shadows?CALLING OUT ALL THE READERS who love action packed magical stories with tribulations and revelations, different perspectives and well thoughtout characters with rich backgrounds.The captivating part is how the author slowly unravels the main plotline of the story whilst getting you curious and excited to know what's next. The way the author efforlessly creates a vivid backdrop is truly commendable and definetly add to the charm of the story.A must read indeed!Keep going dear author! Can't wait to see what you bring out next!Thank you.
In my opinion, the style of building a story and the synposis of the story could be different in terms of just getting straight to the point of what the story is with the synopsis and just build the story from the beginning