I love the passion put into this story. I also love the profanity. These characters and the dialogue is hilarious. Of course some grammatical errors but those can always be fixed. Keep it up
Love it.
pretty good over all just would like background info how he got the system and where he started/ came from. I need 140 charactersI need 140 characters
Awesome story.Some real talent. The characters,the tension,the emotional rollercoaster etc.its all amazingly designed. Cant wait for more to come out
It's a really neat and cute story, I I like how you arrange your sentences. It is easy to read in my opinion.I feels that you can try to write more, I'm sure you will be a good writer.
I really hope they revive this novel and it get chosen for real this is a great novel and they did in no justice leaving it hanging like this
The story unfortunately did not grab my attention. It has a stereotypical plot, but hey, sometimes that is what a reader needs. Its not for me, but give it a try.
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