2nd part of my 1st comment
The MC enemies aren't stupid and arrogant beyond reason and are actual threats, which is a remarkable occurrence in a Cultivation novel. Usually it's just a bunch of unreasonable psychoes wanting to kill him cause they offended themselves. And thankfully there's no mid fight commentary from spectators talking about how amazing he would have been if he didn’t die-oh shi, he survived?! Impossible! Kudos to the author for that one. His friends aren't completely dependent on him and useless. They actually contribute to the situations they're in?! Unheard of. He's just the right amount of exceptional without being too overpowered. No blaring potholes at this point. I recommend reading it.
Beautiful read, thought 5-6 changed were boring in between, overall good story. I recommend give it a read.
II found the comments to be somewhat exaggerated, but by the time I reached Chapter 45, I was already feeling weary of the story. Curiosity led me to flip to the last page, and unfortunately, it confirmed the presence of the same masochistic elements. I thought thatvthe story is something good but honestly the flow of the story is too slow and focus more on being abusied emotionally. This story seems to promote 'wife being abuse repeatedly.'
Theres more chapters..its still ongoing
I've read quite a few rune stories and I quite like this one
till now, i really like it. i hope the author gives a good and happy ending to this story and may be a sequal too.
Well it's definitely the author's first work, I can tell. I do applaud you wholeheartedly for actually sticking to the story and actually following an upload schedule.
Well with that out of the way, I would like to offer some suggestions.
The grammar itself isn't the worst. Obviously there are mistakes here and there (mainly about punctuation and sentence structure) but that's about the average quality you can find on webnovel so I wouldn't fault you.
You are writing in first person POV which is really good for a character driven writing style, but the problem is that you need to include more descriptive language into your writing to make us engaged with the story as well as adhering to 'show don't tell' thing. You see, humans have 5 senses, but you only describe what the mc sees and exclude hearing and smelling completely which otherwise could have helped in making your world feel alive (here you can also use metaphors and comparisons like many authors do). You should also include more internal monologues so that at the very least make him somewhat entertaining to read, as well as slow down the pace a bit to make actions feel natural.
Great stories!! Just when I thought they couldn’t get better, I get sucked into another story I can’t stop reading. Love each one. And so much passion too ...
Hi, winter. When are you updating, the next chapter?
Lol I started anyway it’s interesting and funny so far
these books are so good you have me hooked
more chapters pls...why such cliff hanger...