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this story is intriguing and entertaining , its a romance novel with a lot of plot twists . follow the story ,and trust me you would enjoy it
very interesting and weird twist for a story plot.
Absolute banger! Saving this to my library to binge read later! ? Love the Mc and world so far !
Hey everyone, I'm Gerzyk so I won't hold back with the review. Thank you all for reading my book and please try to drop a review, and also comment your opinions on my book. The support you give me motivates me to keep writing. Many thanks
Im kinda scared to start reading cuz all of your other books are on hiatus and im worried that you are gonna put this one on hiatus and start another book so i was wondering if the same was gonna happen to this book later and you start another book or if you are gonna keep with itPlease reply author and quell my worries ?
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Well it's definitely the author's first work, I can tell. I do applaud you wholeheartedly for actually sticking to the story and actually following an upload schedule.Well with that out of the way, I would like to offer some suggestions. The grammar itself isn't the worst. Obviously there are mistakes here and there (mainly about punctuation and sentence structure) but that's about the average quality you can find on webnovel so I wouldn't fault you. You are writing in first person POV which is really good for a character driven writing style, but the problem is that you need to include more descriptive language into your writing to make us engaged with the story as well as adhering to 'show don't tell' thing. You see, humans have 5 senses, but you only describe what the mc sees and exclude hearing and smelling completely which otherwise could have helped in making your world feel alive (here you can also use metaphors and comparisons like many authors do). You should also include more internal monologues so that at the very least make him somewhat entertaining to read, as well as slow down the pace a bit to make actions feel natural.
Writing quality is fairly easy to understand. It's above average for a webnovel, hence, the 3-star rating. However, it isn't exactly on the level of top novels here so that's that.Story Development is fairly generic but hey, that's what we're all here for.Now, Character Design. This is the one that made me drop and rate, for a very simple reason too. The author tried to make the mc a cringe japanese protagonist. Somehow, even when the girls are swooning over him, he assumes something outlandishly different. It's too stupid it isn't even funny, like, are his eyes fake? Surely, it would be pretty easy to judge if you're at least presentably looking no? But no, the author just had to crash down mc's iq to the negatives.Updating stability, I didn't actually check.World background, fairly average for an isekai plot.
It is a very interesting plot with well written characters. I especially like the goddess and Adeline's dynamic because they sound like siblings ✧u2060u2060(u2060>u2060ou2060
can't wait for more chapters............
This novel is very wonderful, I advise you to read it ??