Man I must admit you've wrote a very good novel
Sorry but this is trash it starts off good and very fast paced read and its enjoyable with fights but as it goes it just drops in a ocean and becomes some mashed up garbage that just doesnt make any sense in the least
Great writing skills! You have a great flow and ngl your story writing skills feels enigmatic and SO SO intriguing that it's almost impossible to stop reading. Definitely a page turner. I was intrigued by your short stories and I really love your themes and ideas for them. Keep up the good work!
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I will give this book a chance because it seems cool but the fact that you stated there will be multiple protagonists is a huge turn off, so if do have multiple protagonists, don't **** it up
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Beautiful work of art my guy——————————————————————————————————————————:)————————————————————————— thanks for the art/whriting it is amazing
The MC is frustrating as he is supposed to have been reincarnated but he has no maturity and despite being a badass in his previous life is a stuttering mess around women and just gets abused by them.The novel has major power balancing issues as a 7 year old can be considered a B class swordsman despite the fact that's considered a very high standard in the world and his father whom is considered talented and who has trained his whole life is also a B class swordsman. So overall this novel os alright if you go into it just wanting to read about a stereotypical overpowered MC who seems a lot like the MC from a 3rd rate isekai.
I always leave five stars on books because as a writer, it's the only thing I could do to support other ones. But for you, it's kind of a well-deserved five stars since your book really shows promise. It's a great read!I'm not going to lie, your book is really immersive but there are a few things that you could still improve on, albeit minor ones: First, you could improve on your information. Don't rush things such as the evolver levels. You shouldn't have done that in chapter five since it would only look lazy to other readers. I've written books with power ranking before and it's always easy to snippet explanations during the story and work your way from there. like "Wow! You're a universal?! That's the highest rank anyone could get! I'm only a Level 9 evolver so I don't know." or something like that. And then from there, work on explaining the other ranks in the next chapters until the readers get a vague idea on it. When it comes to writing, it's always best to even out your information so your readers will always be engaged, not releasing massive amounts of info on one chapter and then no new information on the next. That way, your readers would consistently ask themselves what's going to happen next and continue reading. It's still a constant improvement for me though hehe. Second: Grammar, there were parts where you said "didn't me(e)t" or x369('s) whole body (I included the correct forms in brackets). These are only minor mistakes but readers can get particular about it. I know it sucks not having an editor but you could always avail of apps like Grammarly that would help you with your small grammatical errors. These are only minor mistakes though so you only need a little bit of improvement. Honestly, though, your vocabulary is really awesome and I know you'll get far when it comes to writing. (I also like anime, web novel, webtoons, light novels, mangas, dramas, etc etc ehehe so I relate to ya. Cheers!) I'd suggest going through your chapters when you have free time and just edit it. I do it sometimes but I still miss like a lot of minor mistakes. Phew~!Third: Dialogues. I don't know if it's just your writing style but putting a comma after dialogues is new to me. I've never seen anyone do it and for a good reason. I guess there are etiquettes when it comes to writing dialogues... I'm not sure but it doesn't look professional. Now don't misunderstand. I like your book, I even added it to my library since it's very promising. I hope you don't find any of my reviews as offensive but as a means to improve your skills. I want to support your book as much as I could since I really like it. Keep on writing, keep on improving, and keep on moving forward, because that's what authors do. ^ ^ I know you'll make it big someday. Good luck!
TL;DR: This novel is like having a steak dinner after only eating hamburger helper for months. First off, the writing itself is on point. Just talking about grammar, punctuation, and spelling, it reads like someone actually proofread the chapters, and there aren't noticeable errors that distract from reading! Many available webnovels seem to suffer from a lack of proofreading, but this one doesn't. Even if this author doesn't actually proofread.In addition, the author's voice and varied vocabulary ensure good sentence variety and proper flow in each chapter all the way to the end, upon which one realizes they've read a lot, but still want to keep going. Once again, good flow is often hard to find in webnovels, so this one is a breath of fresh air. Or rather, a bite of sirloin steak.Plus, the characters have tangible character development--the big brain imp from the first 100 chapters is very different than the one now. Not just in power and figure, but also in what he values and how he reacts to events now.Ok I'm tired of writing now--it's a good book, story good, characters good, author good, I def dont regret spending 3 days reading all the way through. Though my wallet hurts a bit, I'd do it again.