PUT ON YOUR BELTS and get ready u all cuz am about to start reading dis and i will gove honest review to dis ok BYE BYE see u on the other sidePUT ON YOUR BELTS and get ready u all cuz am about to start reading dis and i will gove honest review to dis ok BYE BYE see u on the other side
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Is this dropped if not please let me know so I can come back to it although rough its a great novel.
Im gonna level, the intro on this story... isnt great. The pace is great (rare for a WN, so good job) and the characters have a nice foundation; but I cant believe it, for an disaster novel it lacks authenticity. There are so many cases where common sense flies out the window and the established world rules are disregarded (any scene involving the elevator is just a big box of stupid). Its like Im reading a first draft of an inexprinced author; this being a WN I’m probably not wrong. A second draft or editor would improve things drastically on this front, but its not unreadable by even by WN standards. Just dont think to hard about the technical side of the world building.Beyond that Theres... GoodThe premise is interesting, the tension is present, and it has great growth potential for both the story and author. BadA bit heavyhanded with the early messages, could have been done in a more natural way, lots of telling but little showing (chapter 4/5 is mostly just infodumps), The characters all start off as stupid. The MC in particular leaps past dense and dashes for the label of braindead. Thats ignoring his moral compass and naivr begining.Its far from a masterpiece on an execution basis; but the author has enough ideas to make it an interesting, if occasionaly infurating, ride.
is this the same as your other fic? just wanting to ask before I read so I can stop myself before reading this one......................................................
I like how the story is shaping up. He has an OP attribute in the form of luck, which is quite unique. I can also see the improvements in your writing quality.The one thing I want to see is some kind of a rule around how his luck works. As far I have read, he doesn't seem to be lucky everywhere he goes. When does it activate? What are its limitations? Those are some of the things I would like to see.
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It was good read waiting see how they other chapters are but so far keep me entertained wanting to read more help past time when bored nothing to do.