I really enjoyed the world-building and the unique concept of your story. The way you introduced the characters made them feel real and engaging, and the pacing kept me hooked. However, there were moments where the exposition felt a bit heavy, slowing down the momentum. Some parts could benefit from more natural dialogue to enhance the flow. Overall, it’s a great read with a lot of potential—I’m excited to see how the story develops!
It's very interesting how the story start and am beginning to like it I look forward to jaymark relationship to blossom I can't wait for next chapter
Potential! I must say, it is exciting diving into the world. While it's not without flaws, the potential of the plot and promise on display are certainly good.Writing - Needs improvement. A lot. But it's readable, understable and sufficient. Still, if the author can improve the writing by a level or two, it will be amazing. Tip- Focus on some realistic reactions from characters, situations and such. Plot- Since there isn't much of plot given till now, I have considered it's potential. If The author plays it right, the plot can become a great piece among 'system' contents.Character - Dialogues! they make or break the characters and it is good to see, character have plenty interaction. Well done there. Just needs some refinement.World Building- Although not unique in its genre with systems, ranks, monsters, etc. I could understand the world quite a lot from the first 15 chapters. So, I would say it was done great. Well, there is more to explore in future, so I belive again in it's potential.Overall, it is a good story. Needs editing and refinements, but still enjoyable.
A really funny story, and fast updates. A must read, 10/10 so far ♡♡♡
I wasn't expecting some flawless MC when i began reading this, but f*** that guy is just frustrating, I guess I shouldn't have expected much from a Chinese fic (no offense)
I will give myself 5 stars, because I think my novel has that potential.
rating this book as a good one . the mc has a system, i like those.
This book is the perfect blend of horror and comedy. Lisa’s obsession with the supernatural is just as entertaining as her awkward crush on a corpse. ?? Her friendship with Emily is also the heart of the story, adding warmth to this dark, funny plot. Highly recommend if you're looking for a spooky yet light-hearted read! ?
Oh my kind of book I love it Waiting for more…
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Another author is already posting this book , at chapter 90 already , just wanted to let you know
I liked the way it is pacing and the style of writing it is quite impressive ???? keep going