Hmm....This is me reading ML genre book for the second time.... and it’s marvelous. Really, the author did a good job.... I hope to read till the end... So, keep up the writing, author!!! best wishes
this story is absolutely amazing, you can tell the author cares and adores this project, from the power system, to the research he's done, to the world the mc lives in and to all the characters who feels like living breathing people with their own lives and motives. the grammar is probably the best on webnovel and the story is relatively easy to follow. only cons are that the first 25 ch are basically a parody, but it was fun in its own right and shifted to an original story as natural as possible, other con is that the first 40 chapters are info dumpy as all get out, but author fixes that relatively quickly, the pro of the info dumps is the author's immaculate descriptions of everything from characters down to what the character has in his hands, so even though it was a chore to get through, it added wonders to this world, I loved this story, the chapters are also hella long... you can also learn a lot in this story toops. don't expect too much in the way of action and powering up because it's mainly a slice of life magic teacher story who also has incredibly good righteous morals
I love detective stories. The author has written something with potential. My review is based on the first 4 chapters. We have the intro of a professional detective, then the mc becomes a detective.He gets his first case and begins his investigation. The pacing is decent and there are a lot of details everywhere. The only thing I dislike is like the forced romance at the beginning. Other then that it is pretty good currently!
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Honestly, author just **** up this novel. So many messed up profesionist. I mean cultivator why dont stick to path of cultivator, MC just turned into card wtf was that. And honestly mchine gun? Boxer? How can they fucking strong, and what kind of reain they did to become strong? Spirit enery? Mana?. Oh btw MC habe War God system right? Why dont depend on it to become god?
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I only managed to get through the first 6 chapters.... The grammar and syntax are beyond bad. The author miss-uses tenses a lot. Infact he interchangeably uses them in every other sentence. Even the average 6th grader should have a better grasp on atleast the 4 simplest and when to use them: Simple past/past progressive and simple present/present progressive. To the author: I am not trying to disparage your work but you are honestly not that gifted when it comes to grammar, either study up or get an editor to do the work for you. One last thing: even in the earlier chapter you are artificially inflating your wordcount. You are creating needlessly complicated sentences that no one understands and break syntax. Keep the sentences short, it will improve flow, you'll make less mistakes and the reader will in no way be confused.
Rusak bgt bos grammar nya. Kalo ndak niat perbaikin mending ni ya pake bahasa indo aja. Mo baca jadi mager gara2 otak rusak duluan mahamin english ente.
an actually worthwhile story hopefully it gets picked up............................................................................................................
I would cut one star from writing quality. But since I am giving five stars in other chapters, I might just give five stars in writing quality.This start is amazing, though some things are explained. It is a nice way to connect virtual reality with cultivation.Waiting for more chapters.....
Amazing !!! Its a very interesting world setting and though barely anything about the plot has been revealed it still managed to capture my interest !!!!Anyways I look forward to future chapters and I hope you don't drop this